The Stranger

You sneaked into my private room one fine day
Your sharp mischievous eyes reflect a dark bay

You looked cool and sharp in your fearless plight

You watched my raw beauty to your heart's delight

I pushed you out but shamelessly you popped in

You know my many secrets, but, that's no big sin

I know you won't blurt them out till your last breath

So I cannot grace my alien guest with my fiery wrath

The family doesn't want your presence anymore

Our bond is already sparking nasty fights n big furore

You are already cut off from your kin and your world

Our love affair is day by day getting thick and bold

 

Dear, do you plan to spend your life in my little bathroom?

Little Toady, go out to your friends grow and nicely groom.

Author's Note

This is for my little visitor, a small frog , who inadvertently entered my house and sneaked into bathroom and is not willing to go and I am enjoying its stay. The naughty one is escaping my catch.

Reviews

[William Liston]

I first interpreted this as the speaker trying to get rid of a stalker, but the poem never directly said that so I wasn't sure. I then read the last line and voila, it all made sense. This is a cute, lighthearted write, almost child-like in a way. I really like how that vibe sets in at the last line. I think the story itself is fun in that it shows how we can find pleasure in the most unusual things (a frog in your case). On top of that, the title fits the piece perfectly. Nicely penned :)

- William Liston

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you, William for reading this and enjoying the write. My cute little visitor is still with me. I am waiting for rainy season to drive him out because it is hot and dry outside these days.

[wander girl]

Personification is something that adds beauty to this piece.smartly written

Hppy new year and keep sharing

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Wander girl, for visiting and appreciating.
Thank you for the new year wishes. Wish you a Happy New Year!
P.S. Sometimes I forget that you are a very young girl who has to attend school and take tests and exams. You can just ignore the RR even if I send.
My best wishes to you..

[wander girl]

Thanks for the wishes.Have a great year ahead.

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A very cute theme. Very familiar with wildlife visitors. Not frogs as yet though!

The funny thing is we become so fascinated by such a thing as a frog, not because of what it is, but by why it has chosen to enter the home. Personally, i think he wants a swim in the bathtub, or god forbid, the toilet!

An interesting little write.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Doodley, for visiting and appreciating. The thing is when we have visitor or guest for a considerable time whoever or whatever it is we tend to get used to their presence.
This cute little visitor is still enjoying its stay or so it seems to me.. Swimming in the bathtub is fine but as you have said God forbid the toilet..
If it stays on I am planning to give it a name soon...
Happy New year, Doodley!

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Happy New Year to you, as well, Bala. Keep up the writing.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank You, Doodley.

[Norman 223]

I enjoyed the twist in this story. How about blindfolding the little interloper to preserve your modesty??

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you, Sir, for visiting and enjoying this write..
Nice suggestion!

[T.S. Sky]

Nice work. I like what you wrote.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting and appreciating..

[T.S. Sky]

You're welcome.

[barleygirl]

THIS IS SO CUTE!!!! I have tiny tree frogs all around & they come inside often. I feel so bad becuz I know they will die inside without water & food. I've written many frog poems, so I never tire of this topic. I love the way your poem comes at it from a very different point of view, like the frog is a voyeur. You personify the frog with a most delightful sexiness hinted at but not fully disclosed. It's so playful & dynamic, thinking about the relationships for all in your home & this new peeping visitor. Good rhyme & rhythm, too!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you, Margie for visiting and enjoying this write.. This amphibian has been in our house for nearly 3 months. It moves from bath room to dressing and dressing to bathroom.. This little monster is quite at home made our place its natural place.. Sometimes I say things to it and it just listens or so it seems to me..
I liked your term peeping visitor this one who keeps on popping and peeping. Thank you for visiting.
Wish you a Very Happy New year!
Sorry for responding this late,, this site is being a little crazy these days..

[barleygirl]

I know, I couldn't get on this website for 2 days. I started reading a book online in the meantime, now I'm slow to get to reading again on this website becuz I want to go finish that book! *wink! wink!* (((HUGS)))

[Neal S]

This is a cool write. At first, when I was reading it I was thinking hmm this is kind of sexy. I normally don't read the author's notes beforehand because I want to get my own meaning from the piece. So after I scrolled down and saw what this piece was truly about I got a very nice laugh!! Nice work

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you, Neal for visiting and appreciating. I am sorry for responding so late. I am glad that you enjoyed this write.. I too don't read the author's note before reading any write and read with blank mind..
Keep visiting...

[Manu]

Haha, I had a good laughter reading this, B. I love the way you experiment with your writings.
But what if the frog is a cursed one. Are you sure that it wont turn into a prince later..like in old stories.
And such guests are usually not welcomed but you even gave an ode to it...What a lucky frog !
Very well crafted write :-)
Your writings always bring smile on my face..loved it :-) :-)

[Bala Gorthi]

Ha ha ha! You made me laugh out loud..
Thank you, Manasvini for visiting and appreciating. Your reviews always encourage me to continue my experimentation.
The thing is, I am really enjoying the frogy's stay at my place. Sometimes I converse with it.. I wish all those old time fantasies can be real. May be it is a cursed prince, so I think I should give more attention to it from here onwards.
Keep visiting dear.. Sorry for the very late response...
Wish you a Very Happy 2017.

[Manu]

Happy New year and let it be a happy 2017 :-)
It was a pleasure reading your work!
Keep writing!!