Coma

A poet's lament on his failing creativity

 

 Mystic virgin beauty bouncing blissfully in bounty

 The poor ignoramus pervert is lost in lustful booty

 Poet's petty soul meandering down the messy maze

 Creativity cocooned and clogged in a hibernating haze

 Random thoughts queued in the webbed cerebral frill

 See the fate of raw delicacy to saute in a frozen grill

 Imagination fails sparking aesthetics in literary inventory

 Poet's poetry dreads a death bed in the mortal cemetery

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! This is a cornucopia of delightful & well-crafted vocabulary! Your word choices are singing! Your alliteration is on the borderline of being excessive, but that's a good thing for us alliteration freaks. I love the word "coma" to describe writer's block. This is a topic much written about by writers, but your take is completely original & even a little surprising. What an imagination you have! Loved it!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Margie, for the review ! Normally my language is simple but this time I wanted to try something different. but nothing was coming out for the past few weeks as if all the creativity was in coma and then I thought of this title and this write came.
I too feel that more than two words in alliteration in the same verse sometimes sound excessive. still I kept them and wanted to see the response. Once in black and white, sometimes we tend get attached to our own written words and that's how those words stayed on..I am glad you commented on that aspect.
Thank you very much for appreciating this poem..

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The dreaded writer's block.....*sigh*

All one can say is to keep forging through the mire and hope the jumbled mass of words in the mind collide like atoms and become useful, poetic sentences.

This one is very well worded, Bala and your experimentation with rhyme is getting better with every piece. Nicely done.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Doodley, for the appreciation.. I am working on my rhyming.Thanks to the inspiration from seniors...

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Hahaha. I am not THAT senior! :)

[Bala Gorthi]

You are... For me..

[Bala Gorthi]

in writing .....

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Haha. I understood.:)