The Poet's Biopsy

It’s an ode to the word “Family”

I the thinker started it one day,

What my soul contained in its bay?

A thousand samples were collected.

Oh my, my, someone cheated.

My one was not one, but a threesome four.

A trio entwined my tiny core.

There must be a foul.

Adulteration in the soul's sole!

Biopsy progressed and reached the teeniest.

It's again the three on the fore.

How can one be won by three and be a four?

Will you believe?

The LS, CS and all sections done.

They show the three entwining and invading the one.

 

How?

 

The souls I love,

The souls that love,

Covered in the costume called family,

Persuaded The Almighty, to change the rules finally,

For filling my one with the Trinity,

And bringing the love in its infinity.

I smile at the revelation,

And then comes the jubilation.

 

Author's Note

LS- Longitudinal section
CS- Cross Section

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This might be one of the most imaginative ways to write about the way we carry the Holy Trinity inside & how it informs every move we make, every thought we think, every dissection of our lives, we can see evidence of how the Holy Trinity has played out a plan that's regardless of whatever plans we thought we were making. Frankly, I had to read this twice to capture a few more nuances . . . I'm sure I didn't get all of them, becuz I'm not good at catching heavily nuanced messages. But I certainly did feel the main message & the playfulness with which you told it. I love it when writers play with words such as your: "soul's sole" . . . and "how can one be won" . . . this is the kind of crafting that adds an extra spark to a message.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Margie ! This review means a lot to me.
Actually I was swinging in between the spiritual and mundane and there were other factors too.. I had little attractions left in life ( Suguna' s Lover) and my mind always wanted freedom for my spiritual odyssey. Somehow I had to balance things; soul wanting something and duties demanding attention and a little more introspection has brought me back.
Without this realization, I wouldn't have balanced my life between my own aspirations and my duties. I realize that when we suffer, we make our people also suffer though unintentionally. They don't deserve that. And they are loving and enduring , I owe them something. So this poem... I am glad The Almighty put sense in me to realize this. Margie, the trinity is important in life. And I am glad that you read into that ...
Thank you so much for this review...

[Manu]

An ode to family. A beautiful and heart felt write, Bala. Your soul is occupied by the love of three members of your family- your husband and children..making it four, Wow ! They make you complete.

I loved the way you played with the words, this might be one of the reasons why some are getting the vibe of you having triplets which is not the case here.

The souls I love,
The souls that love,
Covered in the costume called family,
Persuaded The Almighty, to change the rules finally,
For filling my one with the Trinity,
And bringing the love in its infinity.
These lines clearly shows how much your family means to you.

Biopsy progressed and reached the teeniest.
It's again the three on the fore.
How can one be won by three and be a four?
Will you believe?
The LS, CS and all sections done.
They show the three entwining and invading the one.
Even in your teeniest part of your body, their love exist.
I feel they are equally blessed to have you in their lives :-) :-)
A love filled write.
Very nicely written. :-) Keep Writing and Keep sharing.
Thank you !!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Gorthi for this review.
I feel your review should remove confusion created by my word play in this poem. I should have been more direct and elaborate. But I wanted the readers to interpret and reach their conclusion.
I am glad you liked the thought. Thanks for this well crafted review.
Keep reading and keep commenting.:-):-):-)

[Paul Bell]

I'm not even thinking of treble trouble, late nights, three sets of teething.
Just how much fun your going to have.
Plus, same birthdays.
Does it get any better.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thanks for reviewing my work. It is about the three souls of my family my husband and kids occupying my whole soul who have become my breathe . This is an ode to the word family. Family makes people complete.
Thanks for your very kind and concerned review.
Keep reading and reviewing.

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What to say......?

While the poem is structurally unorthodox, the theme and content is rather clever. It is an ode to family; the trinity plus the poet, a family of four. I like the idea in this poem; looking within oneself and wondering just how you go from being a single entity to a family unit; and the surprise and satisfaction that comes from that discovery.

A cleverly written piece, perhaps difficult for some readers to understand, but nevertheless a very good write indeed. Nice work, Bala.

[Bala Gorthi]

Very rightly pointed out Doodley, it's structure is unorthodox.
But the thought was like that only. I am glad you liked it. And your interpretation is correct.
At soul level, my inclination is more towards the Fakir of my favorite poem but the grip of the world is very very strong. And I am clutched for this life in this sweet bond of which I am so fond like the lamb of that poem. You can take this poem as a sequel of that one, here, the poet replaced the lamb.
But I really feel amazed at the power of love as it fills us and we don't mind getting our soul being flown away or being crushed under it. Whatever love it is, we just get swayed away and be consumed by it and what not?
I feel, your review will definitely help others in understanding my poem well.
Thanks for your review. Keep reading and encouraging.:-):-):-):-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

triplets, what a blessing...and such a clever poem describing the event and the feelings of giving birth to one's own trinity.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for your review. Your first review of my work......
I liked the way you interpreted the word trinity. By trinity here I mean my husband and two kids. It is an ode to my family. My 'I' (the ego)becomes zero with them. I am totally lost in them and always filled with them as far as the worldly things are concerned, so this poem.
Thanks for reading my work and reviewing it.:-):-)

[grayscale]

I very much enjoyed this piece, looking forward to read more of your work.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you reading and reviewing.
Welcome to my domain.