Cease to exist

You cease to exist even in my memory

A stranger calls every day

I don’t know what to say.

I see only the frozen mist.

You don’t exist, again I insist.

And my dear, don’t knock at my door.

For, dead souls are welcome no more.

 

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

I have read about letting go, I have read about breaking up and I have read about laying their memory to rest but I've never read something so final as this.
To desire to wipe them from memory is the ultimate in letting go.
It's tantamount to sacrificing a piece of us to achieve that goal. Like a emotional lobotomy.
No prisoners taken here Bala.

[Bala Gorthi]

Yeah, erasing a piece of memory in fact ! Once you practise it, they become total strangers and then it is up to you how you meet them. I have done that with my close relations who inflict pain without even letting them know that they don't exist for me.This poem is my immunity against such memories and negative elements.
Thank you Tony, for visiting and sharing your view. Most appreciated!

[Tony Jordan]

Do you know. That could be the pre-cursor to mental state called 'Capgras Syndrome'.
My friend said her mum was so cold with her that she thought her mum had been replaced by an alien and that if she didnt co-operate and behave as if the replacement was her real mum, then the rest of the family would suffer.
The mind is such an enigma.

[Bala Gorthi]

You scared me, Tony. But don't worry I don't let others know that. By the way, are you a specialist in that field? May be I take your help for writing a story on that plot. It seems interesting.

On a serious note, I do understand that a few people suffer from such disorders and those who go through such symptoms are actually not aware of it. It happens unconsciously so it becomes the duty of those who live with such persons to take them for proper counselling and to take care of them.

Thanks for sharing this information.

[Tony Jordan]

I only heard of Capgras lately via my friend.
She thinks it was an early indicator for her later condition which was diagnosed - schizophrenia.
She is under the care of the Primary Care Team as we speak.
Welcome Bala.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes for your own sanity, you need to cut someone out of your life. You do not need negativity or bad vibes. This is an empowering write. Lydi**

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Lydi. This is needed for our own relief and future journey.

[Faith]

I really like the rhymes in this poem!It flows smoothly and you tell a story. Great Job! 👍🏻

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for the review.......

[EvaThornburn]

Enjoyed reading this. Keeps one interested. Thanks, so much for sharing. Eva

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for reading,Eva.

[.]

A well-executed sextet!

An excellent attempt to write a short sextet in rhyming poetic verse. Your message and emotion of the poem is very evident and carries all throughout the poem.
There is a duality to your poem; you can be referring to a person who you have cut adrift from your life for causing grievances, or one can also look at this piece in a supernatural light, keeping the dead souls from the doorstep.

Your rhyme is nicely done and aids your theme very well. Improving all the time! Keep them coming!

[Bala Gorthi]

Yes, you have very rightly observed.
Here, I have used dead souls with multiple meanings. One is in context to the continuity as the readers naturally receive it. The other is for people who are living in bodies but whose souls have lost the grace of humanity and can be ruthless to any extent. A human without humanity is a dead soul for me. Another angle is of one’s conquered fears and evils. They can’t exist once one attains awareness.
And of course, the super natural or spiritual element will always be there, may be sometimes in most subtle form, in my work. I am really glad that you see that part as well. Thank you.
As far as relations are concerned, they may be brothers, sisters, friends or any kin, once they leave us alone in the most critical part of our journey, they are no more than strangers. They can be met, but only as strangers and never in that relation. The doors get permanently closed. That’s my take.
Thanks for reading and encouraging.

[M P Ramesh]

bala,

I honestly differ with the below noted claims.
Actually original poetry is generated due to the reshaping of experiences, passion, emotion, of course dreams ( I refer to Kubla Khan of ST Colredge) grief , anger, etc to a new one , narrowly close to the past and perfectly new in nature in the future . It is called quality of that product. There may be differences about its existence. Here same thinking and pattern may also be forgiven taking in to consideration its potential. Hence plagiarism is not adhere to in any sense . But only when it is said objectively and balanced it will attain the result of perfection. This happens and this is the difference between others and writers. There may be subjective and really private sense inside a work even the writer is unable to crack enough ( I refer to Sylvia Plath ) Even then reader has a ground to play with contrary to writers point of view.
No issue
The case with above is simple that you have already rendered the so most private feeling ( no matters of yours or others ) in to words with beautiful diction and it is felt among all the reviewers here and me toooooooooooo.

There are more ways to express the

seperation
pang
lonliness
loss
hope
moral despair

the above is a way indeed.....


excellent attempt indeed


carry on.....

mp

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you MP Rajesh, for your kind review. I am encouraged.
I liked your sentence, “Even then reader has a ground to play with contrary to writers point of view.”
Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[M P Ramesh]

bala,


there is a speeling mistake in my name
pl read it as
read morebala,


there is a speeling mistake in my name
pl read it as

M P Ramesh

am a poet and short story writer in malayalam and you can read me from INDIAN LITERATURE of kendra sahitya academi as translation........





regards

mp ramesh

[Bala Gorthi]

Sorry for misspelling your name, M P Ramesh

[M P Ramesh]

bala,
doesn't matter.













Pl get me know your original language

mp

[Bala Gorthi]

Telugu. I have not written anything in Telugu.
Just started putting my thoughts in ink.

[M P Ramesh]

fine
there are so many writers in telugu I have got befriended with
in the past.
read morefine
there are so many writers in telugu I have got befriended with
in the past.


vara vara Rao and his daughter
Boppanna

etc

Nice to chat with you ...
mp

[Manu]

A very nice write, Bala !!
when we love someone deeply and get hurt by them, it becomes hard to forgive them. Because they kill our belief and trust. I completely second your opinion on this...they cease to exist. When love dies, then the person too dies along with the memories. You should never welcome those kind of beings in your life.
I really liked this write. :-) :-)
keep it up.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thanks manasvini, for reading and understanding. I really try this when some unwanted memory or moment knocks at the door. I silently say "you don't exist. Just get out."
The most precious time is already lost in those moments where we weep in pain given by the undeserving. So, no more of it any more. A part from the beings, if we can apply this "Door Is Closed Treatment" to our fears and bad memories that block our growth, we can progress fast in our life.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.:-)
Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[barleygirl]

This packs a punch, babycakes! I know the feeling exactly. The rhyming is great, especially your internal rhyme of: "mist, exist, insist" . . . and what makes the whole thing unique is your use of very few words which exemplifies your point perfectly . . . you are not talking to this person, so your message is perfectly succinct. I've experienced this myself, but never saw such originality in describing the situation.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for reading this one. I am glad you liked it.
The best treatment( punishment) we can give to people who wrong us is to give them no space in our memory. It takes time and a lot of self reminding to achieve this. But, this is the best.
Forgiving from heart gives peace and keeps us healthy. So, first, I try to forgive them. But the best way to keep us from not getting hurt again and again is to tell them they don't exist. It may sound heartless but we are only safeguarding ourselves by doing so.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Your words mean a lot to me. :-)

[barleygirl]

What you are describing are the altruistic reasons to not let ugly people live inside our heads becuz it's never rent-free, there's always a cost. But from another point of view, I think these kind of people actually thrive on negative attention, so they WANT you to engage with them, even if it's not a good interaction. The only answer is to shut the door & shut up. Oh how hard that is sometimes, but I've been doing it successfully a lot more these days *smile*

[Bala Gorthi]

Very true. That is the best answer we can give them. I have received new angle on this from you.
read moreVery true. That is the best answer we can give them. I have received new angle on this from you.
Thank you.