Lost in the Labyrinth

The innocent ignorant soul is no better than a lamb

My lamb is lost in the labyrinth of thoughts
Wandering in zigzag paths, its soul is fragmented in slots
Hurt by the thorny bushes of insults, its heart bled
Into the soft touch of graceful soft memories, it fled

It looked at the disgraceful grace of the universe
In sending it as novice which became a curse
Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault

Pleasures, pains and memories of past
Oh dear, they are there never to be lost
Desires and needs are bridges to the future
Oh father, they are befouling it's nature.

Reviews

[Abhilash Hegde]

Interesting piece. Lamb, soul, ignorance - strong theme here. I liked treatment of the subject here. I think, it's very artful to have Lamb as a focal point. These lines come through beautifully for me - "Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault"
Very good reading.. thanks bala!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Abhilash for reviewing my work. Glad that you got the theme rightly.
There are phases where a soul's maturity becomes helpless and it gives up to its own immature part. Since that is also a part of the being, the mature one treats the other as a little lamb.
For me lambs are little cute creatures, they are going to pop up in my work whenever the innocence comes.
I realize that the last stanza is not well integrated into the main theme. It is the conclusion of the guardian soul about how one cannot escape the pain, pleasures and memories and how our needs and desires design our future.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.i

[Lydia Shutter]

When the words do not come easily, it's better not to write a forced poem.....""Being artless is better than being artificial"....that is what that line means to me. All human beings experience emotional pain in life. Escaping it is really not possible. It remains in the heart and soul forever. Our past need not define our future, but it is always there...in the background. A thought provoking write, Bala. Lydi**

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Lydia, for for reading this poem and appreciating.
Sometimes I see myself as that lamb, simple and very plain not being smart or artistic but then console myself and turn philosophical thinking the last four lines.

[Life's Imagery In Time]

Very very deep imagry...... Wonderfully written.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thanks you for visiting and appreciating this write..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we are destroying nature and each other, like lambs to the slaughter...gentleness is non-existent in this world, love being fragmented and bleeding out...

and the pains and memories of the past are at least real...what there is now seems to have no heart or soul....

it's tragic, but the young end up growing up so cold and cynical...

[Bala Gorthi]

Simplicity and innocence no more seen around not even in children. The whole world is after smartness and that is what children are being fed these days.
Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jacob!

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Some very nice phrases and wording here......

Your first stanza is particularly strong; very descriptive phrasing. Your use of a lamb as the central figure of the poem is very astute, since they are very innocent and prone to becoming lost.
The message i am understanding from this poem is that it is difficult to be an innocent in this harsh reality, being thrown into the depths of the labyrinth, and relying on memories and common thoughts to find one's way through the maze.

It is nicely executed, with those exceptional words in the first stanza. A very nice attempt at putting your thoughts into poetic verse. Keep up the writing.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thanks for reading my piece. Your comments mean a lot to me.
You have very accurately interpreted my poem as well my little lamb. I liked the way you gave the interpretation.
Thanks again for your wonderful review !!

[barleygirl]

You've done some interesting word crafting here, such as "lamb is lost in the labyrinth" (good alliteration) . . . "thorny bushes of insults" . . . "being artless is better than artificial" . . . altho when I try to put all these nicely crafted phrases together, I'm not hit over the head with a message of clarity or understanding. Instead I dig to figure out what this means (my personal preference is straightforward writing). In your byline "no better than a lamb" suggests disdain for the lamb. Thru-out the poem, you say "my lamb" once & then the rest of the time referred to as "it" . . . I think the pronoun "it" distances us from whatever inner thoughts & feelings you share. It's like the narrator is disconnected from this lamb of which he/she speaks. I'm not sure how to interpret this, overall.

[Bala Gorthi]

In this poem I wanted to tell how a soul is always lost in the Maze of thoughts. I called the soul as a lamb because lambs are innocent,young and easily lost. When I said that an innocent ignorant soul is no better than lamb ,it has not grown . I may look adult but I am yet to grow. Rather than disdain for the lamb, it is ridiculing the soul for lack of wisdom.
The lamb means my soul which is still to grow. In the first section I showed how my soul wanders through memories getting hurt by bad and taking refuge in the good memories.

In the second section first it blames the God for sending as simple(not smart or mature) but after getting through a lot of turmoil (somersault) it feels that simplicity is better than being a fake.
In the end it concludes that memories and thoughts both will be there along with desires and needs all together hindering its maturity, there by putting it in the swing of pain n pleasure affecting the soul journey.
I'll try to be more straight and clear in my work.
I appreciate your honest and kind review :-)
Thanks for visiting :-):-)

[barleygirl]

Thank you for taking the time to explain . . . I re-read & I see what you mean. I don't think you should change your writing to be more straightforward, as many people love writing that's like a puzzle, that you must figure out, or read your own meaning into it. Everyone has different tastes. You need to write whatever & however it pleases you. This piece is very well crafted, even if it's not the type of message I usually understand better (((HUGS)))

[Manu]

Very well written poem :-)
I like how you compared an innocent soul with a lamb.
I loved these lines :-
It looked at the disgraceful grace of the universe
In sending it as novice which became a curse
Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault
I am really fond of the way you use poetry to describe the reality.
Again, a very well crafted write :-) :-D
keep writing.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Gorthi, for your words of appreciation for this small one. I am glad, you loved some lines. Those are my favorites too. That lamb is very dear to me because it is innocent. For me, sometimes, innocence is also a bliss.
Thoughts and memories are the most difficult things to get away with.One 's whole life sometimes commutes back and forth in those paths without getting anywhere. This poem is just my anguish over this. Since it was a lamb, I couldn't be aggressive in my lines.
Once again, thank you for the mature review .:-)