Descending

a satisfactory poem in a Billy Collins-inspired style. Don't know Billy Collins? *icey stare*

Okay Billy Collins.

Here we go again.

 

(Sighing, I would so love to be you.)

 

Okay yeah I understand

that the funeral home

needs a clean parking lot.

 

But why did all the snow

have to be pushed up against

the whole door to my cathedral?

 

(Now, my cathedral is actually

just an empty lot with a few

nice tress but I feel like

 

A priestess walking the grass

and telling the ghosts [squirrels]

to get some rest for the living's sake.)

 

So can a mountain of unwanted snow

keep me from walking my grass?

 

No, the Priestess has legs

she can climb even if sometimes

her feet dissapear deep under.

 

I found myself wondering once

what if when I reached the top

to climb down there was no bottom

even though it was right below me?

 

What if with every step I lowered myself onto

it was actually the one I'd just left

and the ground was no closer?

 

I'd be descending those icey steps forever.

 

What I never thought to wonder was

what if I changed my mind suddenly

and turned to look back up

to the top of that nightmare mountain.

 

As far as I had not come down

so far away the summit would

appear not to be

but then I would ascend

and never get higher

than I am already, in the middle

 

Caught between the sky of one world

and the bone-littered gorunds of another.

Author's Note

i feel judgement in the air. >,> pf, whatever. I'm feeling pretty helpless right now caught in a state of mind that knows not its own style. I'm trying to go back to the likes of 'Behemoth' and 'Firefly'

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem blew me away. The candid narratives about one's life can become a mundane disaster so easily, but you created a life that invited the reader in. The symbolism was marvelous. Its a shame that we focus so much on how we go that we can forget how to live. I love the way you coupled that with such simple pleasures in life. Climbing those difficult obstacles are sometimes completely exhausting, but this speaker has a glow that can not be overtaken by darkness.

[dreaming dame]

Questions are asked in htis writing. You doseem to be in between two worlds. I love the way you wrote this. I feel with it. Some of it anyway. So, you are now a priestess? Do write me of your current positon. I may be missing a puzzle piece.
lol, I don't know Billy Collins and don't you even dare stare at me like that, because all I'll do is melt it :)

[Thea]

"What I never thought to wonder was
what if I changed my mind suddenly
and turned to look back up
to the top of that nightmare mountain."
A truly wonderful and remarkable piece...I love how you flawlessly written this...Well done!
:)))

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. You set up many visions in the poem. I like the description of people and locations.
"What if with every step I lowered myself onto
it was actually the one I'd just left
and the ground was no closer?"
No weakness in this poem. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote