Chambers of the Soul

Always thanks to my inspirers

 

Chambers of the Soul

 

In aspiration to locate,

the key of a tender heart,

one will encounter a chamber

that walls many other compartments,

 affix to like a maze,

for this is not the heart

caressing multitudes of chambers,

it is a mere foyer,

a  vestibule ,

of a dense sun,

known as the soul.  

 

 

Deep in this spiraling vapors

is a condense center,

the core of a vivid universe;

 it is there that the key

to a heart can be found.

 

 In plain view,

this impervious metal

shines like a beacon,

reflecting its golden color,

signifying the path unto it.

 

Be it fore warned

if you reach this most elusive treasure

that is protected by the drums

beating in a harmonious rhythm,

 synchronized with the very gravity

that houses your soul...

for this finally of symphonies

will absorb you…

 

No locksmith known to man

can unlatch a soul entrusted to the barer…

So therefore, you become the fuel

to power this lustrous star 

 

 

Reviews

[a]

A wonderful poem, spacious and vivid, but the fourth stanza doesn't make very much sense (with the drums, the metaphor is flimsy), it falls out of the well formed context, the key and the lock. Last stanza forms a very well adopted end, it matches the idea, but its not reachable beaucse of the previous verse.
Thank you for this write!

[moon manmad]

saw the avatar for this one and just had to click on it..you know me and my love for planets and space and all things out there...once again a remarkable job, this time linking the universe to the life of the heart...is where we all live, and our hearts can be larger than the space it contains if we work to open up that lock...thanks for another great read, ralphy....your mailbox is getting totally full, dude. :)

[Jake Mancini]

I really like this, man.
You have a nice amount of technicality
without drowning out the emotion or the message.
It is well written work.

[John Morris]

Before reading the other comments are you trying to say 'For one's soul to be worth anything that person much push themselves to acheive great things. and i liked the way you described the soul and hopefully - if I'm right - told the audience the soul is worth whatever the bearer acheieve. Something like that? Please mail me to explain this entire poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When two people are connected by the soul there is no greater bond... very deep and meaningful write.

[Jessica Fox]

nice poem now who is your inspiration or what inspired you. Great job

[Wildfleour]

Very interesting there, Ralphy........

[deeps]

Wow! Ralphy this is so powerful and kind of deep.
I really like this alot. You sure do have amazing talent.
Keep writing always! I have always wondered though
How do I get you to send me your magnifianct writes? Hmmmmm!
Wonderful write Sir Ralphy

[TamiViolet]

This is quite deep. The Soul, how complex, tolerant, forgiving... cutting. Yeah. We cut those who play with our good intention. We make them gone. Like yesterday.

A heart can be found if not damaged too much in the vestibule of confession. Not my confession cause I'm agnostic even though my former brother-in-law is a Roman Catholic Priest. So the hell what? With all do respect.

Fuel... Very vague and difficult to acknowledge.