Take the Journey

 

 

Take the Journey

 

Your reflection,

apparent in the stillness

of the pond is not

as simple as it seems. 

 

The toss of the tiniest pebble

will ripple and distort

the perfect you.

 

You ride the ripple

believing it’s you,

as each splash overwhelms

your mind,

warping your sense

of pride as you begin to cry.

 

What you see and hear

crushes your very soul,

for you believe it to be true

although deep in your heart

it’s not you …

 

As time slides forward,

you notice that the ripples

have smoothed

and in the reflection is…

the perfect you

Reviews

[emmajoy]

To be so smooth, your soul must be a very special one. How I envy that ability to cleanse the soul to such a degree that the perfect you, the perfect soul becomes .. purity.

Your words are so beautiful .. very peaceful, like a prayer.. and, maybe that's where the peace, the stillness, comes from.

'The toss of the tiniest pebble will ripple and distort the perfect you.' Do you mean even the smallest sin, misdoing, naughtiness.. whatever?

The following line is thought - provokingly lovely.

'As time slides forward, you notice that the ripples have smooth and in the reflection is� The perfect you.'

[Emmie]

Perfection--something I try so hard to achieve but will never be. Because no one is. I like this one. Makes me think about the separation between my emotions, and the truth. Man, if i could write like you i'd change the world.

[BABSIE BEE]

I love this...just imagining the theraputic ripples smoothing out lifes little worries.
Written with passion and warmth. Thanks for sharing.
Babsie Bee xx

[deeps]

This is so beuatiful and so peaceful. I like this write it's Amazing

[The Outlaws' Song]

So beautiful! Very smooth and peaceful, indeed!
Wonderful parallel! Your talent is breath-taking!

[Jessica Fox]

Another pretty poem good job you are the weaver of silver words

[Emmie Girl]

Another great poem! Though I suppose it shouldn't be so suprising at this point. The only one thing is-and maybe its just me but- "you notice that the ripples have smooth" is just slightly akward...would "smoothed" work better maybe?

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[Wildfleour]

:)