Lust or trust

A short story about a woman name Susan...it's border line adult but good values

 

Susan is a

voluptuous woman

for when you see her,

your senses will tingle

and transpire into

a world of lust, if even

just for a moment.

Her tantalizing figure

 of 36, 24, 36

has me tripping over

my third leg

and I do desire her

yes I do.

 

But unfortunately

she not so bright,

for she allows men

to abuse her

fine work of art

leaving her in the mist

of the night.

She lies there in her room

as darkness surrounds her,

tears flow like waterfalls

until the sunrise.

 

The next day

she starts again

listening to the lies

that men tell her,  

just to sample her fruit.

 

Her addiction to the lust

that surrounds her warm lips

gives a sensation of pulses

through her body

waves upon wave…

exploding in seconds

again leaving her empty

alone,

 in the darkness of her room.

 

It’s now my turn,

as my halo whirls around

on the tip of my horns,

I must contemplate

the choices before me

as Susan is about to witness

a new man, different man

a man who just might

change her direction…

Then again

it could be more of the same.

Wonder what I will do?

 

 

 

Reviews

[Winter McPherson]

Well, the title just drew me in. This is good. I liked it a lot. It's lusty yet sensitive all at the same time. Gives the dilemma of wanting to be totally selfish yet responsible all at once. Excellent.
In light of this write I think you'll like one of mine called "The Object". I'll send it your way...if you don't mind. :)

[Pj]

Crikeys! What a GREAT piece!!!

"my halo whirls around
on the tip of my horns" >>>>>favourite line of it all

By the way you created such a great image of the girl and portrayed strong messages of reality...and I like it that you also touched on the fact that even though men know a woman is being mistreated...they still can turn around and be pricks themselves

wow, never thought of contemplating in that light.

I love this aspect, the new and different color presented is very interesting.

This is definitely one of my favorites.

And nothing really adult here, it gets its message across so well you still have me here spinning with a new strong message.

amazing fundamentals

a wonderful piece.

[Wildecat]

You are definitely faced with a choice, will it be lust or trust only you can decide. Nice write.

[TamiViolet]

Had to stop by on this one, Ralphy because I just really enjoy the piece, and if it were in a bookstore, I'd buy it. I mean that.

Perhaps she's not stupid but trusts too easily...? We all want to be loved, yes? Is it not the ultimate feeling? Perhaps she's saying.... 'Maybe this time...' My perception. Take it as you wish. I can't speak for a man because I'm not one....

What I think is spectacular is the insight.... It's funny.. Upon reading the beginning of the piece, I found myself whispering.... 'Yeah, you might be the next one Ralphy...' lol. When I reached the conclusion, I saw that you were honest and posed the same question.

I love this, can't say why.... (I'm playing)

Brilliant work!

ps. BTW, it made me tear - up.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Hey I say if you feel she is not being treated right ride in on your white horse and save her... show Susan what great guy you are. Very well written.

[Wildfleour]

Maybe she is bright and just enjoys the chase. Maybe the men are the mice!

[Wildfleour]

And I wonder what she will do......

Good one, Ralphy!

[Brianna Brie]

It's now my turn,
as my halo whirls around
on the tip of my horns,
I must contemplate
the choices before me

Love the words above...my favorite part.

[Jessica Fox]

Don't you wear both crowns? Good job on this one and Susan is an idiot but I can relate to her she is addicted to the lust I'm addicted to the power I have over people lol