Is You

 

 

 

Is You 

 

 

 

 

Standing at the gateway

Of a crystal fortress

One can see a road paved in pearls

That bends, twirls and climbs

The avenues of your mind

 

The distance is infinite

Like driving towards a mountain

Although appearing close, it still oh so far

 

The scenery is magnificent

Like the trees rustling in the breeze

Flowers fingered painted on the sides

As the grass cushions the field of green

While an ocean wave’s hello to the shore

 

The warmth like that of the equator

On a balmy summer day

With the sun shining brightly

Lightly baking all it touches

 

 

The sounds like that of an orchestra

The birds on flutes

Distant thunder on drums

The waves clashing on cymbal

The brush on maracas

 

The aromas that scent the air

Like the red rose in full bloom

The lavender tiger lily open wide

The orchids liberating fragrances

And a simply little pine

 

But the far most epic of this journey

 the vision I see in you

Ponder in you

Hear in you

Smell in you

Want in you

...Is you

 

 

Reviews

[Dani California]

Ralphie... this is truly beautiful.

The imagery is magnificent throughout,
but I think what really makes this a true
beauty is the romance of it....


"But the far most epic of this journey

Is the vision I see in you

Ponder in you

Hear in you

Smell in you

Want in you

...Is you"



Breathtaking.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow what a compassionate piece of work... the journey to the one you love can be long and sometimes troublesome but when you reach that destination it is well worth it... what an eloquent and divine way to describe that journey.

[Pj]

Oh gosh! How beautiful...I loved this :) Great job!

[T]

I loved the imagery you created in your word picture ... Beautifully written ...

[Moonlight]

Well.
When I am generally astounded by poems, it is for their stunning narratives or usage of good words that clearly paint a picture.
Your poem struck out for it's utter simplicity that still conveyed a beautiful message:

The aromas that scent the air

Like the red rose in full bloom

The lavender tiger lily open wide

The orchids liberating fragrances

And a simply little pine.

Such clarity! A beautiful piece.

[Angela]

WOW Ralphie, this is an excellent descriptive piece. You paint such a beautiful picture. I absolutely love it.

"The scenery is magnificent

Like the trees rustling in the breeze

Flowers fingered painted on the sides

As the grass cushions the field of green

While an ocean wave's hello to the shore"


I can close my eyes and be transported by the visual imagery. Very good work!!

[Jessica Fox]

wasn't this a pretty piece. nice poem