Still

Linking the past, present and future

There is more to life than just the here and now!

(Still)

 

The life of the past is no longer a mystery

Since theoretically it was already paved

Nook and cranny mapped by distance

The bumps and potholes travelled

Mistakes encountered

Passing them forward

Understood but

Still

 

The life of the present has only begun, as it remains the present

Every second of every day, you lose a moment to the passing

A flash that congregates to that paved roads of yesterday

Never to return to the here and now we once enjoyed

To freeze the present is impossible

To capture it is futile

To brag you can

Even change it

Remains visually

Still

 

The future remains constant, despite what people might think or even believe

Constant change, glazes every brain in the universe to see change everywhere

Looking deep into the future without even knowing what they are viewing

Each and every pattern changes what was, to what is, to unknown

Even if you can see the future, with the fixed value clear as water

The unknown value can change the outcome even as we speak

Since the thinking part of the past is linked to the future

Our modification of the unknown helps us change

The direction we will travel on the roads of the past

What we take for granted about each other

Only corrupts right and wrong

Choosing a path to save others

Shows compassion to all

Then the future remains

Changing for each of us

With a common goal

To change direction

Is No longer

Absolutely

Still

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

There is more to life than just the here and now! I wrote this poem to clarify who I am and how I see things even in the worst of times. I hope you can envision this with...please comment . I think it might needs some improvement

Reviews

[Dawn]

I love the choices of words here, but for me i dont like changes in font, i find it hard to read. But struggled through, and in fact absoloutly loved the way it is shaped.
This is my fav part.

To brag you can
Even change it
Remains visually
Still


Brilliant write hun, i personally dont think you should change it at all.
Dawn

[Angelic Darkness]

This is a good poem, and very philosopical. AD

[Drea]

Its a great message. It follows ; at least to me, the this too shall pass adage. Your words are a stream of consciousness and so flow free; not sticking to any particular meter or rhyme. Much like the concept of time itself.
This is an editorial put to poetic form; which is a difficult thing to do. I can't tell you how many times I've wanted to do such and not. In a slightly different style and genre it with bite behind it this would be dubbed a rant and those are quite popular. Just look at Louis Black.
As with any stream of consciousness work you risk loosing the reader in your meanderings this can go with editorial work as well unless you happen to be preaching to the choir as it happens. Its a shame when your silver tongued words begin to fall upon glazed eyes and wooden ears; but you likely know what I mean.
The form brought to mind the sands of time slipping away through an hourglass as I read along; most especially the last stanza. I found it quite fitting for the piece and enjoyed the effect. I would suggest trying to edit to your best words so you can write the entire piece in one body to look like an hourglass with the words slipping down through it and end with the word STILL at the bottom by itself with on line break.
Your choice of words; by the way are spot on and very descriptive.

[Deborah Shepard]

loved the format excellant sorryabout the review way no I didnt kow

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I love this - I like the repetition of the word still in it's many uses here and this a very prophetic and heartfelt write. Thank you for sharing yourself. Lovely!
Light,
Siddartha

[lady o]

enjoyed this piece muchly... love the formatting and the message within....

[Dani California]

"The future remains constant, despite what people might think or even believe"

Yay!!!! Someone else who understands this!! I feel like I have just been freed my friend...! Thank you!

This entire piece is spot on. Every line. Very inspirational and insightful. And I absolutely love the way you structured it ... so beautifully! Wow! It shows what a wonderful creator and artist you are.

Very impressive work! Thank you for sharing it Ralphy... :)

[TL Boehm]

I like the format too...it brings the focus down to a single moment - nicely done. I especially liked the metaphor of the mapped road as the past. Well done.

[Constance]

I like the format, but for me the font was a bit difficult to read. Your ideas and your wording of them, though, are exceptionally well done. For me these lines say it all, so well:
"Constant change, glazes every brain in the universe to see change everywhere
Looking deep into the future without even knowing what they are viewing"
That's powerful, philosophic thought, there. I like it when you get deep into thought. This is some of your best work.

[Barbara Walker]

..."What we take for granted about each other, only corrupts right and wrong", I think that is my favorite line! Alot of wisdom in this poem and you convey it in simple to understand words. Also like..."choosing a path to save others, shows compassion to all"..A Good write, Ralphy!

Keep the font and the form, they look great.

It actually gives emphasis to the philosophic insight behind the message.

Amazing form, great choice of words, great rhythm. Very well imparted message.

This is a great piece.