now thats one grand metaphorically enhanced work of heart to ponder, excellent choice of wording
ralphy, the analogies are written to height and draw the reader to dwell in the context, many favorite lines that express an over all timeless wisdom, like
"Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort"
such sentiments take hold of one's thoughts, to search for answers, and yet one seems to answer them all,
and that being found in the last stanza, its touching in the way the expression shows the reader new
perspectives, leaves a feeling of an added sense of knowledge, the meaning, what brings clarity into light,
as in self awareness, descriptively enhanced, an excellent read to edify the soul and mind.
Posted 16 Years Ago
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Good form, good choice of words, the poem flows well, and has a wonderful closing.
The whole imagery was well painted.
With regards to the message...
It was great.
I liked how you were able to draw enlightenment in the process of the poem, from the blurry vision in the start, to a crystal clear sight after. The process was seen in the middle.
This is a wonderful piece.
PS. I will be in China from tomorrow until 1st of May, you will not be getting a message until after.
There are so many messages that I have seen in this beautiful piece of work. To mention them all, would be picking at the very depths of my soul and my mind. I was in the hospital not to long ago, so in a subtle way, some things were extremly familiar. I recognized them right off of the bat. Others, well, I don't even have to think about them as I read them because they make perfect sense. But they give me something to ponder even after I am done with it and far away in my own world. Your words linger in my head like a song on repeat. This one is amazing.
now thats one grand metaphorically enhanced work of heart to ponder, excellent choice of wording
ralphy, the analogies are written to height and draw the reader to dwell in the context, many favorite lines that express an over all timeless wisdom, like
"Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort"
such sentiments take hold of one's thoughts, to search for answers, and yet one seems to answer them all,
and that being found in the last stanza, its touching in the way the expression shows the reader new
perspectives, leaves a feeling of an added sense of knowledge, the meaning, what brings clarity into light,
as in self awareness, descriptively enhanced, an excellent read to edify the soul and mind.
I like this! How ou say lines like this....
"Can a single ray of sun light
Warm your soul
Without the radiance of something to hold"
And the last stanza eally brings the poem to a great finish manking people think. You brought good imagery in the poem.
This was a really great read-just like all of you other work.
No matter how dark life is, or how clouded, there is always a lighter side to itone that fills you heart with love and your soul with joy
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