Confusion

Edited by Annalisa....eye surgery

 

Confusion

 

The morning of the day,

I await for something to cuddle me.

As I lay motionless in the solitude of my own room

I could not help feeling so alone.

Screaming and ringing sounded in the distance

Amplifying as my door opened

 

A milky cloud distorts my views

As they asked me the questions

--Of a personal nature

I felt the sledging,

pulverize my mind

choking my words in my throat

while trying aimlessly to utter a whisper

 

As the cool vital waters drip

Through the branches that finger my existence

My heart calmed to a gentle beat.

 

As the thoughts that once raced

Along the tracks of that vast highway

Broke the boundary and escaped

 

 

So many people around me

The confusion grappled my reality

As I ponder misery

What did I do wrong?

 

Can a single blade of grass

Conceal the lawn

Without the soil to affix its roots

 

Can a drop of pure water

Bathe an ocean and turn it blue

Without the aid of a twinkle in the sky

 

Can a single grain of sand

Fill a beach so that others

Can bask in the fruits of comfort

 

Can a single ray of sun light

Warm your soul

Without the radiance of something to hold

  

The answer is no

But without them

There is no tomorrow.

Suddenly, I can see

Perfectly clear

Reviews

[Michael X]

now thats one grand metaphorically enhanced work of heart to ponder, excellent choice of wording
ralphy, the analogies are written to height and draw the reader to dwell in the context, many favorite lines that express an over all timeless wisdom, like
"Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort"
such sentiments take hold of one's thoughts, to search for answers, and yet one seems to answer them all,
and that being found in the last stanza, its touching in the way the expression shows the reader new
perspectives, leaves a feeling of an added sense of knowledge, the meaning, what brings clarity into light,
as in self awareness, descriptively enhanced, an excellent read to edify the soul and mind.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wow. You came up with this just from eye surgery? Ralphy, this piece is amazing. Great use of metaphors, and choice of words. So many favorite lines I don't know which to pick out. This is definetly a favorite. Nicely done, my friend.

[Nely Amorim]

I absolutely LOVE this piece... it was enthralling to read. flowing and beautiful. i was truly entranced by your words and descriptive skill. thank you so much for sharing. You have really shown me what I am lacking in my own paltry efforts...lol
:)

[Anita Parikh]

"...Can a single blade of grass Conceal the lawn Without the soil to affix its roots Can a drop of pure water Bathe an ocean and turn it blue Without the aid of a twinkle in the sky.."

poetry so pure, just the recital would modulate the universe... and yes, the single ray of light could warm the soul,
its radiance something to hold...

[badgirl beth]

And so the comlexity of life's secret overwhelms the soul...the beauty of it's sea as each one of us leaves a grain of sand upon it's shore..And in the simple matter of the fact...that life's liberty to one is another man's torture, no wonder the confusion over powers the mind...the flooded streets of the universe, scream in the darkness of our emotions...we are the yes to what is~~we are what lifts the fog from the eyes of the world....Bravo to you for this extraordinary piece..it is mighty powerful and speaks debth and profound emotion.!!!!!Cheers:)

[DarkIriswriter]

Your peotry made me aware of seeing little things in a different ray of light. I love the metaphors you placed in each sentence describing in exact detail.This was my favorite because I love the beach..Can a single grain of sand Fill a beach so that othersCan bask in the fruits of comfort.Great work!


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[Jason Nuciola]

i love this pome

[Albert Freeman]

Great poem and writing. I like the metaphors and the way you wove the story.

[Amber Watson]

Great writing. I enjoyed this very much. You are a very good writer and you make sure that you express your feelings and everything that is you are thinking. Thanks for sharing. Please remember to invite me to read anything you have new on your page. Thanks so much.

[Susan M]

The confusing grappled my reality - confusing or confusion?

I'm not really sure what this poem is saying but I know how it makes me feel: Like I am a very tiny part of something infinitely huge, a blade of grass in a lawn, a drop in the ocean, a grain of sand on a beach ... It reminds me of my favorite Calvin and Hobbes cartoon.

[Wordcrafter]

This is so rich in sentiment and the metaphors extravagantly grand "Can a single blade of grass
Conceal the lawn", The rhythm, the cadence, carries one effortlessly too. Stunning sensorial and emotional imagery.