Confusion

Edited by Annalisa....eye surgery

 

Confusion

 

The morning of the day,

I await for something to cuddle me.

As I lay motionless in the solitude of my own room

I could not help feeling so alone.

Screaming and ringing sounded in the distance

Amplifying as my door opened

 

A milky cloud distorts my views

As they asked me the questions

--Of a personal nature

I felt the sledging,

pulverize my mind

choking my words in my throat

while trying aimlessly to utter a whisper

 

As the cool vital waters drip

Through the branches that finger my existence

My heart calmed to a gentle beat.

 

As the thoughts that once raced

Along the tracks of that vast highway

Broke the boundary and escaped

 

 

So many people around me

The confusion grappled my reality

As I ponder misery

What did I do wrong?

 

Can a single blade of grass

Conceal the lawn

Without the soil to affix its roots

 

Can a drop of pure water

Bathe an ocean and turn it blue

Without the aid of a twinkle in the sky

 

Can a single grain of sand

Fill a beach so that others

Can bask in the fruits of comfort

 

Can a single ray of sun light

Warm your soul

Without the radiance of something to hold

  

The answer is no

But without them

There is no tomorrow.

Suddenly, I can see

Perfectly clear

Reviews

[Michael X]

now thats one grand metaphorically enhanced work of heart to ponder, excellent choice of wording
ralphy, the analogies are written to height and draw the reader to dwell in the context, many favorite lines that express an over all timeless wisdom, like
"Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort"
such sentiments take hold of one's thoughts, to search for answers, and yet one seems to answer them all,
and that being found in the last stanza, its touching in the way the expression shows the reader new
perspectives, leaves a feeling of an added sense of knowledge, the meaning, what brings clarity into light,
as in self awareness, descriptively enhanced, an excellent read to edify the soul and mind.

[Enigmatic Amor]

Lovely poem. From the initial dissonance to the questioning, to the calm that is achieved once more. Beatufully written. This piece leaves the reader to ponder, to question themselves, beckons for understanding.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Beautifully penned poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Jennifer]

very cool visuals

[Angel's Lady]

How very poetically beautiful! Very nice write! Excellent job of visualization and imagery. Thank you for sharing this with the world...

[Jacqueline]

The beginning lines:

'The morning of the day,
I await for something to cuddle me.'

let's the readers know the sensitivity that permeates through this piece. At first, there is confusion until you are able to see how we all connect in the grand scheme of things. By the end, everything makes sense. Good storytelling and much heart was displayed here.

[James Takeo Panton]

The words flow nicley, the imagery and metaphors excel in their meaning....excellent work, and you should be very proud of this one!

[Carrie Montgomery]

metaphors...yep, they are there. Such a clever play on words here. I enjoyed the imagery you conjured, the mind's eye has no trouble picturing the beach, the lawn, the clinical coldness on the faces surrounding you.

[Barbara Walker]

I like your comparisons here and I am so glad you can see clearly!! Barbara

[Autumn Dawn Gorny]

A beautiful way to remind us all, that though we are all unique, we are part of a whole and are needed for more then just survival.

[JC]

What a beautiful way of saying we are all connected for a bigger purpose.

I thank Michael for the invite to a fantastic piece.