Confusion

Edited by Annalisa....eye surgery

 

Confusion

 

The morning of the day,

I await for something to cuddle me.

As I lay motionless in the solitude of my own room

I could not help feeling so alone.

Screaming and ringing sounded in the distance

Amplifying as my door opened

 

A milky cloud distorts my views

As they asked me the questions

--Of a personal nature

I felt the sledging,

pulverize my mind

choking my words in my throat

while trying aimlessly to utter a whisper

 

As the cool vital waters drip

Through the branches that finger my existence

My heart calmed to a gentle beat.

 

As the thoughts that once raced

Along the tracks of that vast highway

Broke the boundary and escaped

 

 

So many people around me

The confusion grappled my reality

As I ponder misery

What did I do wrong?

 

Can a single blade of grass

Conceal the lawn

Without the soil to affix its roots

 

Can a drop of pure water

Bathe an ocean and turn it blue

Without the aid of a twinkle in the sky

 

Can a single grain of sand

Fill a beach so that others

Can bask in the fruits of comfort

 

Can a single ray of sun light

Warm your soul

Without the radiance of something to hold

  

The answer is no

But without them

There is no tomorrow.

Suddenly, I can see

Perfectly clear

Reviews

[Michael X]

now thats one grand metaphorically enhanced work of heart to ponder, excellent choice of wording
ralphy, the analogies are written to height and draw the reader to dwell in the context, many favorite lines that express an over all timeless wisdom, like
"Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort"
such sentiments take hold of one's thoughts, to search for answers, and yet one seems to answer them all,
and that being found in the last stanza, its touching in the way the expression shows the reader new
perspectives, leaves a feeling of an added sense of knowledge, the meaning, what brings clarity into light,
as in self awareness, descriptively enhanced, an excellent read to edify the soul and mind.

Excellent writing..It all blended, combined and floated so simply with grace into an amazing piece of emotion and thought. The ending was perfect and could even stand alone... I enjoyed this writing and the feelings and thoughts it gave me.

[Donald Cole]

wow. This is rather profound for the simple complex questions. This is not a poem to take lightly and I like it, though it takes time for me to see clear. well composed and thoughtful, but also inspiring thought.
good job
Don

[Kristallo]

I like how accurately you portrayed unity in this piece. I always heard that loneliness is the human condition, here you depict that with such clarity and affirmation. Beautiful examples of how even the smallest thing has a purpose in comparison to the greater picture. I especially loved the line, "As the cool, vital waters drip through the branches that finger my existence, my heart calmed to a gentle beat." That feels so... natural to me. I found this to be very enthralling from start to finish- thanks for sharing!

[Mystic Dreams]

How profound! The shift of focus from a person to the contemplative vastness of existence is great. The further into the poem the more beautiful the words. Stanzas flow beautifully.

Fantastic write!

Hugs, Mystic

[JoSamarthi]

my god, what perfect timing, I can so relate to your poem now because I feel the same way.. such beautiful melancholic emotions tugged at my heartstrings..

"But without them
There is no tomorrow.
Suddenly, I can see
Perfectly clear"

a perfect ending to a perfect muse

[Natasha Ashway]

The answer is no / But without them There is no tomorrow. Suddenly, I can see / Perfectly clear

Wisdom.

Nice. Thanks for sharing!

[Sarah]

I liked the repetition, it made this poem flow very well. =) It's a little confusing at some points... but then I guess that goes with the title. XD Good job. ^_^

[Tara Jean Olson]

beautifully penned, my friend! i loved the metaphors

[Otter]

Excellent work, well written, thanks for sharing.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

what a beautiful poem - full of great images...

fantastic job