Confusion

Confusion

A Poem by Ralphy
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Edited by Annalisa....eye surgery

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Confusion
 
The morning of the day,
I await for something to cuddle me.
As I lay motionless in the solitude of my own room
I could not help feeling so alone.
Screaming and ringing sounded in the distance
Amplifying as my door opened
 
A milky cloud distorts my views
As they asked me the questions
--Of a personal nature
I felt the sledging,
pulverize my mind
choking my words in my throat
while trying aimlessly to utter a whisper
 
As the cool vital waters drip
Through the branches that finger my existence
My heart calmed to a gentle beat.
 
As the thoughts that once raced
Along the tracks of that vast highway
Broke the boundary and escaped
 
 
So many people around me
The confusion grappled my reality
As I ponder misery
What did I do wrong?
 
Can a single blade of grass
Conceal the lawn
Without the soil to affix its roots
 
Can a drop of pure water
Bathe an ocean and turn it blue
Without the aid of a twinkle in the sky
 
Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort
 
Can a single ray of sun light
Warm your soul
Without the radiance of something to hold
  
The answer is no
But without them
There is no tomorrow.
Suddenly, I can see
Perfectly clear

© 2008 Ralphy


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now thats one grand metaphorically enhanced work of heart to ponder, excellent choice of wording
ralphy, the analogies are written to height and draw the reader to dwell in the context, many favorite lines that express an over all timeless wisdom, like
"Can a single grain of sand
Fill a beach so that others
Can bask in the fruits of comfort"
such sentiments take hold of one's thoughts, to search for answers, and yet one seems to answer them all,
and that being found in the last stanza, its touching in the way the expression shows the reader new
perspectives, leaves a feeling of an added sense of knowledge, the meaning, what brings clarity into light,
as in self awareness, descriptively enhanced, an excellent read to edify the soul and mind.

Posted 16 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.




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Excellent writing..It all blended, combined and floated so simply with grace into an amazing piece of emotion and thought. The ending was perfect and could even stand alone... I enjoyed this writing and the feelings and thoughts it gave me.

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow. This is rather profound for the simple complex questions. This is not a poem to take lightly and I like it, though it takes time for me to see clear. well composed and thoughtful, but also inspiring thought.
good job
Don

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like how accurately you portrayed unity in this piece. I always heard that loneliness is the human condition, here you depict that with such clarity and affirmation. Beautiful examples of how even the smallest thing has a purpose in comparison to the greater picture. I especially loved the line, "As the cool, vital waters drip through the branches that finger my existence, my heart calmed to a gentle beat." That feels so... natural to me. I found this to be very enthralling from start to finish- thanks for sharing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How profound! The shift of focus from a person to the contemplative vastness of existence is great. The further into the poem the more beautiful the words. Stanzas flow beautifully.

Fantastic write!

Hugs, Mystic

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

my god, what perfect timing, I can so relate to your poem now because I feel the same way.. such beautiful melancholic emotions tugged at my heartstrings..

"But without them
There is no tomorrow.
Suddenly, I can see
Perfectly clear"

a perfect ending to a perfect muse

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The answer is no / But without them There is no tomorrow. Suddenly, I can see / Perfectly clear

Wisdom.

Nice. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked the repetition, it made this poem flow very well. =) It's a little confusing at some points... but then I guess that goes with the title. XD Good job. ^_^

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautifully penned, my friend! i loved the metaphors

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent work, well written, thanks for sharing.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

what a beautiful poem - full of great images...

fantastic job

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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