A Friend

A fine line between love and friendship

 

A Friend

 

 

May it be before you is a challis filled with the rare essences of feelings that await the taste of your sweet, caressing lips. The lovable fruit that laces your tongue merely by drenching the waters that quench your scorched throat as the cooling extinguishes the flame.  The precious color of your eyes reflects your happiness and awakes the dormant sensations that have been hidden since the beginning of time.

Oh as the sparkling crystal churned the panoramic image that engulfed the warmth of your beating heart, I breathe pond you.  The rare flower that blossomed has done so in a dome that only you can aspirate and the dance that waltzes into your soul shows the rare gift that relinquishes in our friendship. 

Reviews

[THERISA]

Ralphy, this poem flow smoothly past the readers, except for the first line of the opening stanza. The wording seems to be awkward to me. May i suggest:

"May it be before you is a challis filled with the rare..."

Just changing the words here would elevate your poem. As Ms California say, this is a well crafted and excellent poem. Thank you for sharing this with us.

[Dani California]

Whew! How passionate! That's one heck of a friendship! lol

Truly, this is very lovely, Ralphie. Your imagery and word choices are always so
well crafted. Excellent work my friend.

[Wildfleour]

This was a terrific read and an interesting setup for poetry. I sometimes take pieces that I write and reconfigure them to see how it affects the meaning/reading experience. That might be fun to do here.

One question:

I breathe pond you --- I'm not sure what you meant here.

[J.Black]

This was a great read, really.
I love the words you chose for this, is really flows nicely.

[Michael X]

ralphy, this is visually impacting work, the emotional force pushing each word into motion brings
your poem to life with passion, as one reads, the imagery becomes transporting and takes the
heart to another place in time, in way of happening, how you capture the moment in words,
i enjoyed reading this as the meaning is real food for thought, many delving aspects to consider.

Well painted words with matching font. I like the form and the message imparted. A very well written artistic poem. Worthy read

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Love and friendship is a very blurry line sometimes. You write well about it. I think its beautiful and captures all that goes on when you have a friend that you love. Beautiful

[James Takeo Panton]

So colourful and exotic.......it rolls along nicely.....deep.....