Cold Concrete

I speak to her with my eyes

but her ears hear only silence

And her pounding heart matches

the pace with which she walks away

My ears hear only footsteps.

My eyes see only the empty space she left behind.

The pavement leaves no trace of you.

Did I imagine you the whole time?

How vivid my imagination to break my own heart.

Reviews

[Emily L]

Wow. Just beautiful. The last line especially stuck with me. I had to go back and read this poem over and over a couple times to determine if this girl you speak of is real or just a vivid illusion in your mind. I love how in this poem you manage to get a major point across while only using a few sentences. Great job, I loved it!

[J. B.]

Thank you for such an in-depth response to my work! I am glad you enjoyed it so much :)

[CherryEllie]

I love this! It's very deep and meaningful. It was as if your feeling were coming off your poem. I could feel what you felt. Especially, the last line really got me thinking. This is amazing. Keep it up.

[LKBillips]

So much can happen without saying a word. Really well portrayed.

[HC Abiona]

That last line really got me. Awesome, just awesome!!