Babydoll Girl

My favorite piece so far. Close to my heart and reaches out to any girl who has felt lost and alone in the world.

Just a girl, just a new life at the start

Innocence was the name she lived by

Each thought was a dream from her heart

Her tears raindrops down from the sky

Ooooo she's an angel misunderstood

Grew up livin the rules of the hood

Ohhh baby she's juss tryin to prove it

Make it or break it comes down to a hit

What is love when reality falls

Dreams slip away flicker of hope

Just a girl on her own livin each day

Struggles real climbing a rope

Ooooo she's an angel misunderstood

Grew up livin the rules of the hood

Ohhh baby she's juss tryin to prove it

Make it or break it comes down to a hit

One day someone saved her

From the wreck building strong

U gonna be ok for sure

Girl juss keep it goin along

Ooooo she's an angel misunderstood

Grew up livin the rules of the hood

Ohhh baby she's juss tryin to prove it

Make it or break it comes down to a hit

What is love it's success no matter how small

Now she's realizing all of her dreams

Wake up, smile, give life your all

Remember sweet girl nothing is at it seems

Ooooo she's an angel misunderstood

Grew up livin the rules of the hood

Ohhh baby she's juss tryin to prove it

Make it or break it comes down to a hit

Reviews

[Cherry Pepperweb]

As I read, it became a song. As a girl, I can relate to falling down, losing my way, and winding up ok despite it all. Really liked this. Nice job.

[Zoey Ree]

Thank you Cherry! Always happy when others can relate! :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You're welcome!!

[Chris]

a lyrical form - I wonder the music behind your eyes.

[Zoey Ree]

The music lies deep and love runs strong :)

[Chris]

I so agree with that.

[jb]

Nice beat, you did a great job sis! ;)

[Zoey Ree]

Thanks! :)

[jb]

Your welcome :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

How understand a little girl's heart must be learned from you. I really appreciate your views and thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem. It was amazing!

[Zoey Ree]

Aww, thank you so much for the kind review Skyfall27! So glad it reached out to you! :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome friend your message was very clear n loud so it reached me. :)

[~]

Zoey,
I like the repeated refrain, and the slang used to give it a more authentic form. A good message too.

[Zoey Ree]

Thank you so much moonskittles! Your words meant a lot to me!

[alf]

Hi Babydoll007. straight up I loved your directness. This is the situation, my struggle, my life, and here is how I'll cope!!! Love the positivity in the final stanza. I believe it is up to all of us to determine our status in life, and then to cement that decision by our actions. LUUUUUUUUUUUUV this poem, and suggest it would make a great song!!!!!!! alf

[613]

This flows really well. I'm glad I stumbled upon this piece. Nice work!

- Brittney

[Zoey Ree]

Thank you Brittney! :)

[marcus]

that's good, it sounds kinda more like a song to me!

[Zoey Ree]

I'm glad you noticed the musical flow to this poem. I originally wrote it as a song, then changed a few lyrics and made it into a repeated refrain as a poem :)