Cutthroat

This

Weekend

I took

A minute

 

To

Think

About

My life

 

And

If you

Should be

Out of it

 

I'm sure

You know

What I

Decided

 

This

Wasn't

Split

Second

 

It

Has

Been

Building

 

For

A

Long

Time

 

I'm

Not

Part of

Your world

 

Mine

Is

Too

Cutthroat

 

For

You

Innocent

People

 

But you

Aren't who

You say

You are

 

You are

Not

My

Friends

 

I don't

Know who

Or what

You are

 

But

I

Don't

Care

 

Just

Keep

Out of

My way

Reviews

[Wolfe Greytome]

Again, this is a wonderful piece. I can give no advice here that I haven't given in other reviews.

[*~Kristy~*]

You should listen to the song, "I Don't Care," by Three Days Grace(ft. Apocalyptica). It is an amazing song. Here are the lyrics:

I try to make it through my life
In my way
There's you
I try to make it through these lies
And that's all I do

Just don't deny it
Don't try to fight this
And deal with it
And It's just part of it

If you were dead or still alive,
I don't care,
I don't care,
Just go and leave this all behind,
Cause I swear, (I swear)
I don't care

I try to make you see my side
I always tried to stay in line
But your eyes see right through
That's all they do
I'm getting buried in this place
I got no room, you're in my face
Don't say anything, just go away

If you were dead or still alive,
I don't care,
I don't care,
Just go and leave this all behind,
Cause I swear, (I swear)
I don't care

(Violin solo)

I'm changing everything,
Cause you won't be there for me
I'm changing everything,
Cause you won't be there for me

(Piano solo)

If you were dead or still alive,
I don't care,
I don't care,
Just go and leave this all behind,
Cause I swear, (I swear)
I don't care

If you were dead or still alive,
I don't care, (I don't care)
I don't care, (I don't care)
Just go and leave this all behind,
Cause I swear, (I don't care, I swear)
I don't care
At all




Your poem reminded me alot of it. It was so beautiful! I loved it!

[Theresa]

Well written and it flows well. I like the way you organized the words it gives more emphasis to each statement that you make. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.