Labyrinth of Dreams

Written for a contest. It had to be inspired by the picture and have three stanzas with four lines each. I know it's not great or even good ... but it's what came to me.

A world of beauty shattered,
But in my dreams I see,
Bits and pieces of the world I knew,
Fighting to become free.

 

Elusive dreams, they find me here
Lost and searching in this place.

Where things are scattered, tossed, and torn

And where tears pour down my face.

 

I feel so small trapped in this place

This labyrinth of dreams

I’ve trapped myself here in my mind

Where nothing’s what it seems.

Reviews

[Crowley]

Your rhyming worked very well and the imagery and feeling of angst and frustration were well depicted. Waking or sleeping this has good meaning. Nice work.

[An owl on the moon]

You captivate the reader with the drifting, dreamish landscape created, line by line. Your work here is so relatable, the fight for dreams to break through. .to come alive for us no matter the circumstances. Powerful poetry, and so glad to see you writing again!

[Bubo]

I feel so small trapped in this place

This labyrinth of dreams

I’ve trapped myself here in my mind

Where nothing’s what it seems.

Such sorrow,and a wonderful write that voices for us somewhere we all have been, wanting to be somewhere full of beauty but also trapped by our dreams and our expectations coming to little.........very apt, and well written.

[Ladysue]

Oh, this is quite profound. You did an excellent job with this. Love those two last lines...a lot depth in this short piece. Wonderful work...

[just a touch of bitters..]

I can definitely relate to this. (I'm quite the escapist & I've always found dreams as the best escape mechanism.)

Very well done! :)

[Emily B]

you've done a wonderful job putting this together

good to see you, and best of luck on that teaching position :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A natural mechanism for us is too retreat to a fantasy world when life brings us pain, but sometimes we get so lost in that world we can't find our way out... very well written, I know I understand exactly what you are saying.

P.S. really nice to see you writing again.