The Seed

It's within us all.

So tiny it lies
Beneath the ground.
Overwhelming piles of sludge
Holding it captive.

 

Tendrils of frost
Reach down with long fingers
Teasing and tormenting
Chilling.

 

At last a ray of light
And warmth seeps down to
A shivering, shaking seed
Overwhelmed and insignificant.

 

The sun's rays embrace it
Warming and comforting
And at last the seed stretches
Toward the light

 

Pushing through the muck
And allowing nothing to stand in its way
Working, straining
At last it's above the ground.

 

Nothing can stop it now
Hope becomes its mantra
And even rainy days strengthen it
Until, one day, it stands tall.

 

It stands strong against the wind
And mighty against the storms
Sometimes it bends and sways
But never does it break.

 

Something insignificant
Has grown to something great
Weathering the storms
And reaching for the light.

Author's Note

This isn't the best I've ever written, but it comes from inside me while I'm nurturing my own seed and trying to help it grow ...

Reviews

[Emily B]

THe thought that kept coming to mind was our one fight to grow and stand and be strong. We are the seed, too. This is a wonderful write, Dezaraye. Thank you for sending it to me. I always look forward to returning the many wonderful reviews you've given me.

[SM Davis]

I think it is very good and I dare say that the metaphor is strong here. it can be a multitude of things, and either as literal or literary it is a fine piece of writing.

[An owl on the moon]

I love the imagery of the seed, so fragile and yet unstoppable! There are too many people who do not realize their potential and see only the tiny emblem, never connecting to their destiny. Beautiful piece!

[garrett]

good

[garrett]

that was asome

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This is a very good write and a very good narrative of your own self being. I think this speaks a lot for all of us, we all are growing, and sometimes we have those times when we need to nurture ourselves, help us, strengthen us. You will grow, you will become stronger. We all do. Life's hard lessons make us who we are they guide us and sometimes we make the wrong choices but that is how we grow. This is a great write and you may not think it is your best and thats ok, but it is good one.
xoxo

[Blackbirdsong]

I wish you would stop writing things, "this isn't the best I've written," and just let your writing speak for yourself. This is a lovely poem and I don't see what you find that isn't good. Others agree too, so why not remove that message and be okay with your work? Sure things might need some polishing. I polish my work for ages before I'm happy with it, then I go back and polish it again...big deal. That's part of what it takes to be a writer. Its like chipping away until you get to the diamond, and this poem is a gem. Seriously. You know me, I don't give false praise.

*HUGS*

[Yvonne Heidt]

You really need to stop disqualifying yourself. Stop it. This is an excellent, descriptive poem that has many levels and metaphors.

Nobody on here can beat you as far as I'm concerned - descriptions wise. You have an excellent writing ability and vision. Believe it.

[Glee]

Great write. Truly inspiring and surprisingly motivating.

Pushing through the muck
And allowing nothing to stand in its way
Working, straining
At last it's above the ground.

I like this part. It has a slight tone of aggravation.

[DarkAngelWriter]

I so love this. Hopefully, someday I'll get out of the muck. Amazing write.

[J.D. Pine]

Seeds are magnificent things. You brought that out well. I look forward to reading more of your work.