It's Raining

Listen.

Can you hear the rain pitter pattering against the pavement?

It's tracing down the windows ...

slowly, slowly,

and then all at once a streak zipping to its death on the pane below.

 

It's hammering against my coat, cold seeping through the down, making me shiver ...

and I can't stop shaking.

It's echoing in my mind ...

endlessly ...

d

  r

    i

      p

 

 

      d

    r

  o

p

 

 

d

  r

    i

      p

 

 

      d

    r

  o

p

 

Make it stop.

 

It's beautiful at the same time it's not.

It's hurting my ears at the same time it's comforting my soul.

It's washing away my tears and creating them at the same time.

 

It's raining outside today ...

 

It's raining inside today.

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

I personally love the rain. It is one of the only times I truly sleep well. not sure if it is the hypnotic thumps or knowing that the earth is in a way bathing to become refreshed and anew for us all to witness new world the next day.

This was perfectly flowing and a deep underlying life of it own. I really enjoyed this piece alot.


Great Job!!!!

[Blackbirdsong]

The interior and exterior aspects of rain. I guess I've thought of it before while it's raining, but I can't say that I've ever seen it written about so eloquently as here. I love the idea of a droplet falling to its death. Perhaps it was a suicide. Is rain happy? Interesting ideas running through my head now. :)

[BrightEyes]

"It's raining outside today
It'sraining inside today"

What a profoud ending to this piece...so many times I find my emotions echo the weather or, maybe it is vice versa? lol. a creative piece....more about the state of our soul than the rain. nice.

laura

[chr66is]

I really dug the feel of this piece. You really capture what it feels like to be stranded in the cold rain. It works on both a literal and a metaphorical plane. Nice writing!
Peace,
Chris

[Sarah Emily]

alot of people write about rain but not like this
you did a good job expressing yourself in this peice
not alot of writers do express themselves
sarah

[Julian]

I can't resist a "rain" write as cliched as they can often be and so i had to read this one. I am glad i did..simple words creating clear images and creating atmosphere. I love a poem that can create atmosphere( i think its a difficult skill) and so i love this little poem. Julian

[Victoria Lee~]

This is a really beautiful write...I love the way you describe the confilct you have with rain.. Excellent work!

[Rin]

I like how you liked the rain, but yet didn't like it and how it soothed you yet annoyed you.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A beautiful way to express how the rain can make you feel. Thank you for sharing. debileah

[Bubo]

This is such a deeply sorrowful piece, of feeling wet outside and crying inside so your drowned in water..........
The descriptions of the falling rain, and the imagary are lovely, I would suggest maybe using
drip drop as a falling word
d
r
i
p

etc, to give that feeling of rain falling as well as the down fall of tears from within.
This is a very strong piece, very lonely and sad though, with much underlying emotion.

[Helen Woodward]

It's stunning Dezaraye, I could identify easily with your love/hate relationship here. It's dreary yet wonderful...the latter for me of course because of the drought...
No comma after the second (slowly)
Try; It's beautiful, but at the same time it's not...or...It's both beautiful and unsettling...
It's hurting my ears, yet comforting my soul ...
Great observation and thinking power...simple yet effective...get my drift????
Helen xx