Just Breathe

A moment of calm ...

Close your eyes

 

 

 

 

Inhale

 

 

Arms extend slowly
Fingers touch
A crescendo deep inside
Begins to build

 

 

Exhale

 

 

A silhouette on the shore
Waves create a melody
Clouds light as body
Dancing for no one

 

 

Inhale

 

 

Rays of the sun
Bouncing off the water
Stretching toward the light
Fingers brush the sky

 

 

Exhale

 

 

Laboriously, slowly
Sway to the sound
A cello pierces the air
The waves crash

 

 

Inhale

 

 

A distant pulse
Calls from the sea
Light slips into water
Clouds glow brilliantly

 

 

Exhale

 

 

Feet slide through sand
Spinning in time
Music floats tranquilly
Fingers brush stars

 

 

Inhale

 

 

A tear falls
Joining the sand
Lapped up by waves
A part of Earth

 

 

Exhale

 

 

Cello music stills
Waves crash
Movement slows
At peace with self

 

 

 

 

Open your eyes

Reviews

[Barry S. Maltese]

"A silhouette on the shore
Waves create a melody
Clouds light as body
Dancing for no one"

It is amazing what we notice when, engulfed by silence, we concentrate what takes place around us. Just breathe. Let no thoughts clutter your mind, and the whole world fills your mind with pictures and sounds.
I love your picturesque speech, how you bring the scene to life. Nicely written. Very enjoyable.

[Yvonne Heidt]

I am so impressed. Your descriptions are just so vivid. I loved this. It is absolutely hands down beautiful.

Excellent job.

[doctor's diagnosis]

i really like how you punctuated with the inhale / exhale bit. it was great. do you play the cello? i really want to learn to play the violin. right now i play the piano, drums and a little of the flute and guitar.

[All faded blue]

Beautiful!!! I am going to put this in my favorites, and use it as a relaxation technique. Nice imagery.

[Carole]

Sounds like a breathing exercise or meditation...You used a lot of great imagery here...Thank you. I am more peaceful already, having read this....:) A silhouette on the shore...waves, dancing, music, sunshine, and PEACE. What more could we ask for?

[Helen Woodward]

This would be great on a tape! Terrific meditation piece Dezaray, I'd buy it if you taped it. The flow of meditation would be interrupted if you had to read...try selling it to new age recording companies...It's so good that I think they'd go for it.
Beautiful work.
Helen xx

[Emily B]

Oh, Dezaraye. This was beautiful and serene. You must have been in a calm and peaceful place when you wrote it. I really felt it. Just amazing.

[Sean Allen]

This was beautiful Dezaraye, thank you for writing it.
I think this simple exercize will keep us healthy and alive longer.

[TL Boehm]

beautifully written. It has an ephemeral - dreamlike quality to it. The poetry paints a vivid image in this one. It is like a balm, a warm wind....wonderful writing .

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

WOW I love the way you do this piece.......its so beautiful!!!

[Rain]

I don't want to open my eyes , it was too peaceful with them closed. I notice you feel this melodic rhythm ties life and music together. They both have rhythm , a beat to them. I also feel something connects the two. This was a soothing piece , lacking some of the meloncholy you sometimes put in your writing. I like. Rain..