City

A city carefully structured by words
Each and every letter is an addition to the colors which contribute to a priceless piece of art
Each and every building is a reflection of a memory eroded by time
Birth of a civilization conquered by the rhythm of synchronized heartbeats
Echoes of timid voices are heard within the silent street corners.

It is a paradise orchestrated by simple chords of acoustic guitars
Reality knows no limit
It appears to be a dream touched by perfection
Loneliness
As an inmate, guarded by the blissfulness  of our imagination.
The stars twinkling peacefully
Leading broken souls into intoxicating emotions.

A city which lingers a scent of hope
A city carefully structured by words.

Reviews

[ResiNoth]

I like the framing structure, and I love some of the lines. A couple -- particularly "the stars twinkling peacefully" do seem to lack originality, or maybe just the oomph that other lines like "Birth of a civilization conquered by the rhythm of synchronized heartbeats" have, in my opinion. If it were mine, I'd rework some of those to make the whole thing stronger.

[garrijd]

A very, very nice image and theme. Are there stronger words you could use in lieu of "addition,""contribute," and "It appears"? If I did not like this poem, I would not comment.

[h d e rushin]

"it appears to be a dream touched by perfection
Loneliness
as an inmate, guarded by the blissfulness of our imagination"

and of course I've broken the context but what a wonderful way of saturating sight,
of allowing comparison; the likenesses of wonder and image to wander about unchallenged.
This is fantastic image creating...Thanks for sharing this with us..

dana

[BLACKBEARD]

hahaha thank you for the review, i appreciate it.

[Marc Hamel]

fantastic imagery! i feel i glimpsed a place id never seen before as i read it. i read it four times now and enjoyed it even more than the first!

[BLACKBEARD]

thank you, i am glad you like it!

[Bear]

Nice soliloquy, it has good philosophical depth and shows real intellect in your wording choices. I look forward to reading more of your work, thank you for sharing.

[BLACKBEARD]

it is a pleasure. thank you for reviewing my art. it means a lot

[nazia]

I liked the way you used word as the basic structure of city and from thence on to I guess the entire mankind, thoughts, emotions and expressions. well written. :)

[BLACKBEARD]

Thank you for the feedback. I appreciate it

[Honey.K]

I really liked the expressions used and the description is beautiful. Keep writing :)

[BLACKBEARD]

Will do. Thank you :P