Miracle

A heartbeat beating to live

A broken mind, yearning to be heard.

Trapped in chains

Wishing for a miracle.

That will never happen.

Author's Note

https://the-dreamer-inside-me.blogspot.com/2016/11/miracle.html

Reviews

[Elsie]

In these few lines it shows the struggle one goes through and how disappointment seems to come more then any miracle

[Omikron]

I like it, short and simple. However, I couldn't help but feeling like the poem was a bit fragmented, an easy mistake when it comes to short poems. I strongly suggest that you challenge yourself in writing Haikus (Poetry following a Japanese layout), you should look it up, it has helped me a lot!

Other than that, I think this poem is delightful.

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[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you for your advice. I will try it out.