Chains

These chains keep on

pulling me back

into the darkness

Why does it seem

that I can never

escape this world.

Do you really like this?

Just believe in yourself

You’re stronger than

you seem

Tomorrow will be better

than yesterday

You will break this chain

once in for all

Who are you to give up and seat?

Get up and show the world

that this chains

won’t kill you

Have more confident

in yourself

There will be on day

when you will be free

from these chains

of darkness   

Reviews

[Confuser]

BDunderthestars: Uplifting poem and I enjoyed it very much. We all have chains, your writing seems to encourage us to let go of so many things that hinder us from fulfilling our dreams; that keep us in stalemate, never believing in our possibilities: which without self-esteem cannot be achieved.. Great writing.
Have more confiden(ce)t
in yourself
There will be on day
when you will be free
from these chains
of darkness
I hope and pray everyone will be - Encouraging work. Dale

[Bhumika Devkota]

Yes, thank you Confuser.

[Confuser]

You're welcome....Dale

[Dalton Wagoner]

Nice work! This is a poem like I would write. You go!

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you.

[anne]

good trial...motivating...:))

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you anne.

[R Smith]

indeed the light will come to your rescue eventually, no chains can bind us forever, great write my friend :)

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you.

[Briana O'Connor]

A great message lies within this piece. The struggle feels real, and the positive increase through the poem is inspiring. There are a few words that misused and a couple spelling errors. Also, I would recommend playing with the words a bit to increase the emotional impact. Thank you for sharing. Nice pen.

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you, I will try that.

[Elsie]

That is a wonderful poem. It seems to speaks straight to me and give me the hope to keep moving forward and to not let my fears control my life. Thank you for writes this poem

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you for reviewing, I am glad it helps.