In the Desert

In the desert,

            The parched sand

Indicative of my throat

In the forest,

            Moisture pooled on my tongue-

            Akin to the leaves

The sea…

            The sea deceived me

Reviews

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

Powerful writing, thanks for sharing.

[Brad Dehler]

Absolutely, much appreciated from you

[Ayvid N]

The sea is so profound, treachery, therefore is in its nature. Whats amazing is how your words think of people like the sea.

Moisture pooled on my tongue-
Akin to the leaves

Please accept my compliments on the superb imagery here. These are the kind of things I dream of writing and I'm sure all who love writing do. So delightful!

[Brad Dehler]

Such a great compliment. I am humbled. Thank you so so much!!

[Ayvid N]

Have a great day :)

[Brad Dehler]

You too, have a great day DIVYA :)

[Dennis Wolf]

This can be interpreted in many ways, but I'll spare you my code breaking... Uhh skillZ. Hahaha


Thanks for sharing, I've enjoyed the read.

[Brad Dehler]

Absolutely Dennis. That is the charm of writing poetry sometimes- the double or triple + meanings. Searching for any meaning, so imperative.

[Dennis Wolf]

Yeah well.. I like to have the freedom of flooding words and expressions the readers way... Hadn't tried much poetry in English... The few things I have produced are really not as I had hoped they would turn out but maybe I'll share some later on.

Cheers

[Brad Dehler]

Some things are easily seen "Cause and Effect" and we can shape our reactions accordingly.
Some things are "Cause and Affect", making you feel a certain way, surprisingly, counterintuitively.

[willweb]

Wow, that was way too cool. Just the thoughts that flow in this, the comparisons, the depth of the feelings. I am rambling here but it is the fault of this poem. not me. I will be back to read more.

[Brad Dehler]

Heartfelt thank you. Double "cool" vote. I appreciate you. Really happy this has positive impact for you :)

[Brianna Brie]

The sea offers many depths as it is deep and dark. The salt water would parch you like the desert. Yet, the shear mass of water seems to want to water you like the leaves amongst the forest. Deception for sure! Enjoyed this thought provoking write.

[Brad Dehler]

You are much appreciated. I hope for people to find it thought provoking. Thank you for being so keen and giving me the time :)

[Chris Shaw]

The sea is incredibly moody. More so than the desert or forest. I liked this descriptive piece and its imagery, very much. Thank you for posting.

Chris

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Chris!!

[Zoe Richardson]

Oh yes... the sea. The sea is quite deceptive. I recommend mountains. They've served me well. This is a well written musing on nature, as well as something deeper. As deep, perhaps, as forest silence and sea itself.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Zoe! I agree with you... Now I'm heading to the mountains!

[andrew mitchell]

In the desert is an ocean we crave for but can never reach - the mirage. Nice writing.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you sir Andrew

[jacob erin-cilberto]

deception...that oasis that becomes a mirage...
love can parch the heart.
j.

[Brad Dehler]

Yes sir! thank you Mr Jacob!