Rapture…Interrupted (Upon Her Empty Pillow) (A Bpoet & MsJewel Collaboration)

I told my love 

While dreaming

In a soft whisper

Of the early morning

As a half-light stirred

A threatening slow pleasure

Since dawn would wish to hurry…

 

If I could turn back time love,

I would eclipse

This sunlight with a wink

Embracing each moment

Safely within your warm arms

Of dreams that linger

 

Forever awakening

In a sense

Of lost ravenous intentions

As a Rapture...Interrupted

A beloved

Stream of consciousness

In the mind of her love

Who cherished romantic sunsets

 

After taking her breath away

With his valiant efforts

Of devoted pleasure

It's a shame this rendezvous

Had came to an end

Within his passionate fantasy

Upon Her Empty Pillow

Author's Note

Bpoet's stanza's are italicized, MsJewel's are not. All reviews welcome thanks for stopping by & enjoy.

Reviews

[Dez H.]

Gutta u raw hell yeah!!!!!!!!

[audrie]

"If I could turn back time love,
I would eclipse
this sunlight with a wink"
This is a very passionate lover's poem
Sad that these wondrous exchanges have the possibility of coming to an end
-What you have described in this poem is one of the reasons that I get hesitant to enter into relationships

[Trace]

I always enjoy reading a poem that was constructed with two poets thoughts and words. This one works well together. Trace

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem, very vivid, a great collab indeed...great job

[Cody Williams]

A very nice collaboration between the two of you! Thanks for sharing!

-CW

[MsJewel]

Thank you for inviting me to do this collab with you. It was a pleasure!
:) Julie

[Rita L. Sev]

This is lovely, a hint of sadness at an ending, but how sweet the memory... Nice collaboration.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A nice collaboration. I like the way that the piece works together; the beginning showing a quiet sense of desperation and the ending illlustrating a sense of closure. You both have a way at getting to the heart of things. Nicely written.

[Pryde Foltz]

Great work, you two. Was a very enjoyable read. Man I hate empty pillows.