A Loss For Words

A jaw dropping event

Took his breath away

In utterance

To this very day

A misconception would prevent

An initial statement

From being relevant

As authorities & the public eye

Questioned a witness

Who painfully had

A Loss For Words

In order to embrace

A living nightmare

Not worth reliving

He wished it would be

Forever gone

Within the shocking

Mental corridors of his estranged mind

Yet the killing scene left behind

A lasting impression

Scaring him to the brink

Of a chattering lifelong stutter

He was never able to recover

In order to give his pivotal testimony

To help identify a sought out killer

As the authorities & a grieving family

Wished he had never suffered

From the epitome of A Loss For Words

Author's Note

Trying something a little different from my usual norm. All reviews welcome, thanks for stopping by and enjoy. :)

Reviews

[Leandro Mendez]

what a piece.. so well put together..this was a great read

[kublakhan27]

I really like the idea of mental corridors in an estranged mind...a very powerful piece of insight into the human psyche, well done :)

[s y e]

I used to stutter when I was a kid, pretty badly, too - but now that I am older I no longer stutter, I only really stutter when I'm nervous but I try and say the word in my head. There are a lot of celebrities/singers/actors who stutter but when they are singing or in movies not a single time do they stutter, it's cool. It all has something to do with your brain.

~ Noodle.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow i really really love the story you've presented here! such an interesting thought that a person could help to avenge a murder, but a loss for words could prevent that from happening completely. i really enjoyed these lines:
"He wished it would be
Forever gone
Within the shocking
Mental corridors of his estranged mind"
if you're open to experimentation, after those lines you can detour the poem (maybe a separate stanza) explaining some of the images of the murder that will never leave his mind and how they're engraved there.

i really enjoyed this experiment- this is one my favorite of your pieces!

[Sheila Kline]

Oh my..........to think what his testimony could have meant is thought provoking for certain! A very interesting read in a well crafted format.
I really like it!

[Kristin Lee]

I really like this one. It captures the human element of a tragic situation in such a raw way. great job.

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

Really enjoyed it, My perspective is of a writer with a major testimonial yet he struggles to pen it, it spoke to me in that sense.

[quinfinn]

words are the meat of all conversation...but...actions are the gravy. well penned!

[SyberRose]

I find it amazing how singers who stutter do not stutter when they sing...I enjoyed this piece BP:)

[Rogue]

This was cleverly done. Chattering lifelong stutter? I do hope his penmanship is legible.

Excellent job. :)