Ive been called a black widow more than a few times in my life so the title of this one drew me in. Such an intriguing creature the Black Widow. I, personally, hate spiders but if there is one that I might respect it is her. Nice pen friend.
Oh...so enchanting! My husband came across a few black widows at work. He couldn't resist the temptation to catch one and flirt with her danger. Your poem captures this intriguing creature well.
I actually enjoy this take on the whole "black widow" concept...perhaps she is just misunderstood. Sure, there is danger and there is fear, and the possiblity that you may lose yourself, but there is also the pleasure, desire, yearning and blissful elevator toward nirvana that you find within her arms...it's a cunundrum to be sure.
A couple little things:
Line 5 I think you mean "A part of..." but if you mean "Apart" then it should be "Apart from"
Line 15 "Until her gratification process" -- this line just doesn't do it for me...I see what you mean, but I think there could be a better way to say it, "Until the process of her satisfaction" or something like that...I don't know.
Ah, a fresh take on the black widow...lovely and alluring but she's disenchanted. Suggesting though she's extremely dangerous, maybe at her core she's searching for the same thing we all are... a true and lasting love. Very thought provoking write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
A great piece Bpoet, for it speaks volume, and portrays the danger, of a strong woman, that a man can't survive... nice work.
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