Never Forget Where You Come From

Never forget where you come from

Because

The way you were raised

Will keep you safe for the rest of your days

As the sun rises

And sets

The course during your life’s journey

Will not divert from

Staying true to your own personal requests

For obtaining prevalence

Will become solidified

And concrete while not existing in vain

Foreboding what could happen within society's social terrain

Maintains the perspective needed to

Feel grateful and blessed

As the days to fulfill your conquest

To obtain a meaningful objective

Remain not obstinate

But progressive

As you try

To reach the finish line

Becoming the champion

Of your proposed destiny

A designated door will open

So your fateful reality will unfold

As it approaches

At the right designated time

In your life

Reviews

[spiritwind]

Very encouraging
"Maintains the perspective needed to
Feel grateful and blessed"
And

Becoming the champion

Of your proposed destiny

A designated door will open

So your fateful reality will unfold

As it approaches

At the right designated time

In your life

[Debbie_Philly]

Really wonderful piece... the flow is seamless

[†Tracey†]

Very positive and well written..xo

[Damien Davison]

I did quite enjoy this poem. I found it helps one look forward with hope, and it motivated me to keep up with my efforts. Thanks for sharing!

[Krista Weiss]

Really good poem! Loved it! :)

[kublakhan27]

Great revision...there is one typo where "coarse" would be "chorus" but I really like the poem itself.

[David Scott]

A thoughtful sentiment to be sure. Not a bad poem at all...
"The way you was raised" could be on purpose or should be "were raised"
The second to last line did not sound comfortable to me. A bit redundant in wording, "right designated time" ...? is there a wrong designated time? Just my thoughts. Otherwise very nice.
Be well.

[AleyshaRosa]

The way you was raised
Will keep you safe for the rest of your days

I actually really enjoyed these two verses because they contrasted so fantastically with

The coarse during your life’s journey
Will not divert from
Staying true to your own personal requests
For obtaining prevalence
Will become solidified

The first isn't grammatically correct ("was") (NOT a bad thing btw =P )
And the second.. well the second holds a depth beyond simply "the way you was raised." Even your use of words not heard very often, words that I might need a dictionary for.

Enough about literary devices. The message hit me hard. I was not raised in a perfect world filled with perfect, kind, giving people, but despite the harshness of my past, I would not be where I am today.

Thank you for sharing, BP

Koodoos

[kublakhan27]

This feels like a bit of a departure from your normal style, which is by no means a slight against either style...the delivery just seems more straightforward here, and certainly has a universal feel to it...well done.