A Savvy Invitation to Gain Longevity After Resisting Temptation

You become vile

When you lie

For your cohort named filth

On the inside

The guilt trip

Was so subtle

That becoming a pillar

Within your proposed conspiracy

May indeed become

A lousy situation

Of doubts

Leading to the anarchy that now goes on

Beyond the inner minds of the public eye

Comprehending why

A mirage which was disguised

As an illusion

Displayed that gaining clout

Is the only solution to focus on

One’s vision

For obtaining the best wishing list

They could ever ask for

May and can become a closed door of opportunity

If they choose to persist in

The deviance

That goes on right outside their own front door's path of entry

Inside the secret

Of a precious novelty

Within the midst of their so-called desires

To be free while gaining privileged wings

So they can become best friends with longevity

For eternity

 

 

 

　

Reviews

[Bertie]

A great write; short, razor-sharp, dark, wordy, lots of very very good things in this...Personally for me some punctuation wouldn't go amiss but that's because I'm a little bit dyslexic so at times it all runs into itself too much and blends together so that i miss the real detail and power of what's being said...But this is a small thing and I reiterate that this is a great piece with lots of punch and feeling and the emotion is pitched perfectly! Well done :)

[spiritwind]

thought provoking walk on the dark side

[cloud]

You write so deeply. There is a freshness to your words and ideas that really stand out. A very good poem.

[David Scott]

Let's just be friends... Are these the words a curse or a blessing??? An ongoing debate in the battle of the sexes. Gaining savvy may be the best payoff... Ha
Enjoy the insightful write!

[LisaEve]

Written from experience! I hear you. REALLY good read!

[Faceless Poet]

great!!

[Pax]

wow, I'm always amaze by your profound wisdom my friend... this is no Exception..
well done!!!

[ms. barrie]

this is an amazing write, very thought-provoking and written with eloquence, your words speaks volumes, everyone could relate to.
. great job. thanks for sharing

[Emberlorna]

Very deep and intriguing. Honestly I had to read it several times before I could grasp the overall meaning and I love it. It really stands out to me. You are very talented. Well done :}