Unhinging Fate

　

Sifting through the ashes

Of an Unhinging Fate

Weariness has become my companion

As I demonstrate

Why the eye of storm

Has hovered over me for so long

Will I have to retreat

As the shoreline for my dreams

Becomes depleted

By waves of treachery

Beyond my control

Or will the grace of restoration

Change my desired plot for greatness

As it unfolds

Within the coveted pages of my memoir

By far

My peers will revere in the success of the transcript

Exposing the duress to co-exist

With a predestined consequence

For becoming a saint of social change

Upholding a wavering clause of monumental significance

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

To echo the review below, I've always had a hard time singling out certain lines or sections of your pieces, as more often than not, they're perfectly cohesive units with the whole being greater than the sum of its parts. It's not an easy way to write but it seems to come to you naturally.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

An intense piece for sure. From the beginning
Sifting through the ashes
Of an Unhinging Fate
I have to wonder - is all of our fates unhinged? - A question I have asked my self many times,
Moving on to the eye of the storm - hovering over you for so long, I have to admit - this I can relate to
As the shoreline for my dreams
Becomes depleted
By waves of treachery
Beyond my control
Control - loosing control, spiraling out of control, and you speak of treachery,
This has a lot of emotion, a lot of complex feelings and thoughts. Very well penned. Not sure if what i got out of it, is what you intended - there is a lot of complexity, but on many levels it is a piece I can relate to.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree . Nice and intence poem .

[Corset]

your writes are always so intense, as if every thought that ever formed decided to take up residency in your head.

[spiritwind]

A very good write.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write, I enjoyed these parts as well as the vocabulary in this poem:
"Sifting through the ashes
Of an Unhinging Fate
Weariness has become my companion"

"Will I have to retreat
As the shoreline for my dreams
Becomes depleted
By waves of treachery
Beyond my control"

[That_Girl]

Like the others said, it's hard to single out certain lines of a poem that is seamless, but thuis chuck really stood out to me. Beautiful job, truly.

"Will I have to retreat
As the shoreline for my dreams
Becomes depleted
By waves of treachery
Beyond my control"

[Krista Weiss]

Really great job!! :)

[ms. barrie]

This is an amazing piece, once again, so poetically profound. Incredible, that i cannot even pick out a single line that stands out on it's own, for they all do! Great job, thanks for sharing :)