Painted Picture

I've been here before but I couldn't tell you when

Only that I recognize this place and all that I've ever been; 

A lost and lonely child,  now a woman but still 

Confounded and confused in this storm I've created.

I find myself submerged screaming into nothingness

Digging slowly my own grave in this bleak existence.

Nothing is lost, merely misplaced in the terror of failure.

Pray for me to find my path, find my way,

I've let myself forget how to survive and breath above the sea,

I've forget to let myself be warm in your embrace,

It comes now into the light, not that of the day

But of your eyes in its sweet surrender

And I understand that I've forgotten nothing.

I've just misplaced everything in the minutes and hours of your absence

As it all unfolds in front of me, nothing more than a painted picture.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. We seem to fall on the same road. Hard to figure which way to go. I like the poem. The inner story to understand life ways and movement. The ending was very good. A question always leave room for thought.
Coyote

[George Love]

You express yourself here very well. Can't find much to add, so I'll say nice work, and keep on moving forward.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

another very well written piece art in poetry form great read

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

Nice, I like the way you commit to an ending of a still image.. after youre done reading it kinda stays with you and slowly starts to fade.

[Dezaraye]

This is so beautiful, but so sad. I find myself in this place as well. A little girl who is now a woman, but still full of little girl longings, hopes, and dreams that will never be fulfilled.

[Tate Morgan]

You neednt worry this is normal and well expressed

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. i see a brilliantly expressive poetic mind, heart and soul ...

[Shalini Dinesh]

the poem is well written with deep emotions and expressions, well done..

[Steve]

nice......i like how this sounds!

[J.Black]

My God you're good. Talk about emotion!

[Kelley]

Great poem Brette. I could relate to everything you wrote in this,
Thanks for sharing.