Universal Lover

Jay awakes to the sound of gunfire. His face spins in annoyance. Jay has a shattered heart and nothing else seems to matter. His roommates play online war games constantly and they share no sympathy for Jay. Jay moves day-to-day lifeless and without direction. People ask him how he's doing and he always answers with a faint, "Yeah....". She went from being his everything to absolutely nothing. Jay constantly refers to her as "that b***h." He no longer will call her by her name. Jay felt things he never thought he could while being with "that b***h"; now he feels nothing and anybody he encounters feels his emptiness as it glows around him. He wishes newspaper taxi's would come to take him away. Jay just wants to leave his current home. So he goes downtown to purchase "medicine" to take him away from this world, at least for a little while. Jay tries and tries to forget her, but she creates bad trips for his mind. Jay has no friends to comfort him since he moved out east for school. His current depression has made it difficult to make new friends. When he sees a beautiful woman the only thought that processes through his mind is, "What a w***e." Moving east with her so they could both go to the same school has severely back-fired. To make things worse they have a few classes together. When he sees her in class chatting with other guys he thinks, "F**k my life." He repeats it in his head over and over. After class a guy named Raul come up to him. Raul tries to convince Jay to go hang out with him and HER. Jay tells him to go to hell and walks away. Raul use to be Jay's friend, for three years exactly. Let’s just say Jay wasn't exactly excited to see Raul and "that b***h" hooked up after they had just broken up, two hours after to be exact. Jay no longer speaks with Raul. It makes him sick to his stomach just seeing them together. Jay has to live with seeing them together four times a week. He laughs thinking that just the year before they were all together and close. He was complete with her and he had the best friend in the world in Raul. And now he lives with the thoughts that his best friend betrayed him and is shoving it in his face every day at school. Even though Raul may not mean to shove it in his face it's the way Jay sees it. Raul holds her and kisses her forehead, the sight send jolts of jealousy through Jay. Jay sometimes has to leave class so he can wipe the tears away without anybody noticing. Jay just wants to hold her again. Nothing can live up to what he had. He lives alone with his thoughts, and it is dark and lonely. 

    Weeks later. Jay is talking again. Not with Raul or "that b***h" but with others. Jay has overcome his jealousy and woeful feelings. Life is too short and Jay decided to move on even though it was harder than anything he's ever had to do before. Jay is now infatuated with another girl. A girl that is completely the opposite of "that b***h". Jay still strongly despises Raul and her, but he no longer is affected by them. They are worthless scum who deserve each other. Jay now thanks what he went through, it was an odd blessing in disguise. Things happen for a reason he supposes. Jay's got things to do, too many things, and way too busy to feel sorry for himself. Being crestfallen takes too much energy. Jay followed up on his passion for history and later became a professor at a university. Depression held him back for a while but he woke up one day and thought, "I don't want to be sad anymore." So he stopped being miserable and went out and lived his life. 

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

Good job of emotions expressed by Jay, who saunters around angry and depressed after learning that that his so-called friend stole his ex-girlfriend. Also he is more of a loner than other kids. He finds it difficult to make friends ...ultimately Jay is able to overcome his loneliness, sadness and jealousy. He doesn't feel sorry for himself anymore. The transition into Jay's new mood is a bit quick, but that is okay. The only other thing I would suggest is to separate into more paragraphs (breaks), easier on he reader's eyes. Well done!
Best, Betty

[matrixmark]

Jay comes across as being quite angry with the world and on edge andwith good reason as we find out that his friend Raul ended up with his ex.You expressed hi emotions really well, demonstrating his anger loud and clear. But you do end it on a good note, by saying that Jay woke up on morning and decided to live his live.

I actually think you could turn this into a story. There are quite a few options which you could take with it.

Good grammar skills.

Mark.