Empty Bottles

This is written about a lover of mine from long ago and the finality of life

Complacency slips into tragedy

Along with all that was promised to me.

 

A fractured fairytale laid to rest

Beneath the hands upon your quiet chest.

 

Mute cries echo through these ears

That listened idly to lies year after year.

 

Shivers ring through my veins

Jilting what has soothed my pain

From all the feelings you suppressed and

the six foot distance you put between us.

 

Author's Note

Since this is such an emotional poem it's hard to really get in and edit it, so any suggestions and observations are welcomed.

Reviews

[Kep - Mcnibble]

makes me sad
for sure

I like the style well
Can't criticize

[Bedlam The Gypsy]

"A fractured fairytale laid to rest
Beneath the hands upon your quiet chest. "

"Mute cries echo through these ears
That listened idly to lies year after year."

Wow, this -is- full of strong emotion. As Paul said, beautiful and cryptic and yet quite clear at the same time. At least the events, and in so few lines. Thank you for sharing this personal and moving piece with us.

[Paul Skyrm]

"the six foot distance you put between us."

beautifully cryptic ; one can hear the flowers decaying on the lid