Lost Love (Not lost at all)

I search the moving crowd

It is your name I yell aloud

It is only for you to hear

But close to me, you are nowhere near

 

I continue to call out your name

Still you run, to you it's all a game

My hand falls on your shoulder now

Closer to you, I'd gotten somehow

 

The person I'd found was not you

They were unfamiliar, their face brand new

I thank heavens that you ran away

I would not live the life I do today

 

A stranger he is not anymore

I know him now, much better than before

It is all because you didn't love me back

Love is no longer something I lack

 

 

Author's Note

It is longer than my standard poem, but of that I am unusually proud! What do you think, is the ryhming too forced?

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

I searched among the crowds,called out your name,yelled a loud
I told I lost some love here among you did you see
I called your name time and time again,still you run
you think it like a game..at last my hands fall to you
But somehow it was not you,it was some lovelier,I just missed
But i fell to unfamiliar face,brand new,a stranger now is my love
I know him well feel him well better than you
You never loved me back,now its never love I lack
For I found me a new love a new heart..he is all for me
lovely write..

[Carrie Montgomery]

I think it flows quite naturally, no force detected. Great job: this is easy to relate to and I LOVE happy endings!!