Ocean View

Wishing someone special could be with you at a special moment

I stop to stare.

Is what I'm seeing really there?

The most beautiful thing I've ever seen,

So many things that this could mean.

Not the same without you, at all.

Watching tides rise and fall.

Staring at the ocean view,

Wishing you could see it to.

Author's Note

I personally think it's a tad cheesy, but I write it, so I posted it...

Reviews

[Alaska Frost]

i think the last line is fine the way it is...
"Wishing I was here with you" implies that you're not there...when the rest of the poem says you are
It would have to be "Wishing you were here with me" but that doesn't rhyme, so the last line is fine the way it is!!
I think the poem is sweet :)
You could describe the scene that you were looking at if you wanted to. I don't think it would take away from what you are expressing in the poem.
-Alaska :)

[Anastasia Starlena]

I like this piece the flow is amazing and the rhyme superb. Well done.

[Kaitlyn]

I also think the last line could be 'Wishing I was here with you', but which do you think sounds better? TO SHOULD BE TOO (two T's).