under the sun

So meaningless under the sun

I wish upon a night,
if i could be long remembered,
i saw a weather change
i felt the hearth of man broken
i had the word said; the fait
of the fool will overtake me
also
i saw twisted things can not
be straighten
what then do i gain by been wise?
For the wise man like the fool
will not be long remembered
in days to come,
with much wisdom
came sorrow
the more knowledge
the more grief,
meaningless, meaningless
the world so meaningless
meaningless, meaningless
under the sun
fly away the sun
fly away the moon
fly away the stars
leave the world so dark

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Mina]

This is so deep
I love itt
You really writee well ;)

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot mina

[Prritiy]

For the wise man like the fool
will not be long remembered
in days to come,
with much wisdom
came sorrow
the more knowledge
the more grief,
meaningless, meaningless

Wow what a great and careful thought you have weaved in.
liked it.
keep on writing David.

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot
for the review

[Prritiy]

you are welcome

[closed]

this poem certainly has atmosphere
you have a dynamic pen at your disposal
you are definitely a literary star^

-Dream

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot
your review really means alot

[closed]

no problem, keep up the good work

[Sami Khalil]

"with much wisdom
came sorrow
the more knowledge
the more grief,
meaningless, meaningless
the world so meaningless :
I think you have penned a great poem. Thank you for sharing...:)

[ayosonolowo]

Thank alot
for the review
i must say; your review mean alot

[Sami Khalil]

The feelings are mutual. You are welcome...:)