The narrow gate

Too much to say

I was graced to go
there and come back








the land of honey
and joy






the land of passion
without the superficiality of need







but the wide gate
was my way







i walked back
to browse through the city







i saw joy full soul
and everlasting peace






i saw the heroes
and the rich crying for help






i felt the blazing
of fire








i saw helpless people
crying for help






i saw merciless
creature at ease





and narrow was the
gate that leads to pease






and wide was the gate
that lead to destruction






i felt for my self
and i felt for eternity







how i wish i could see my self
in the house with the narrow gate

Author's Note

Please is it poetic?

Reviews

[Rogue]

I liked it. I thought it quite poetic prose. Worded very well and the story you're telling comes across very well.
"pease" (this word is the same as peas in meaning). Perhaps peace?

Very good write. :)

[ayosonolowo]

All my thought was that i wrote rubbish
thanks alot your review really
encourage me more
thanks

[Rogue]

You are welcome.
Nothing rubbish about it. It reads very well actually.

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks



alot

[J Todd Underhill]

I think this is poetic. I liked the way it was presented as well Bravo!

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks

alot

[ron]

yes it is. It is very nicely done.

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks
alot