Who has time..

well,just wrote as i observed about life,me and world..i write in very simple tone. and i like to experiment too..so i would love to receive your positive and constructive critics.

Who has time...?
in this busy fast life
and damn practical world,
everyone is lost
in struggling for a better life
that the life
yes ,the real life is lost somewhere,

in childhood,
it is lost somewhere in the boring classrooms,
under the burden of home work and studies,

in adulthood,
it is lost in struggling for
a successful career and searching for a job,

later on ,
it is lost in office,
in working hours ,in meetings and late sittings,
and then onwards
in repentance of being old too early,

the real life is lost,
in every manner,
in search of something
that is supposed to be a better life,

who has time to think ?
why is so important such a better life
at the cost of our own freedom
and our own dreams,and happiness ?

who has time ?
to learn the hardest and longest lessons
of the history and wisdom?
who has time to think
about such system and societies ?
created by ourselves in a way
that deprive us of the beauty of life
who has time to get rid of this ?
who has time ?
to stop by and ask,"am i really happy" ?

this life is worth living by the one,
who has time..................................!!!

Author's Note

well,just wrote as i observed about life,me and world..i write in very simple tone. and i like to experiment too..so i would love to receive your positive and constructive critics.

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Your words hit the mark, for evaluating our lives. Is this all there is? You think if you go the prescribed route, that here is nirvana in the end, a rainbow, but there is just more of the same and by then, too old and worn out to do anything about it.. that's why society wants conformists, they can't stand the thought that a rebel may have a better way, a more rewarding life. A true seeker will be ostracized, because misery loves company.

[Angelic Surrender]

Deep. I like it :)

[ba_mcfarlane]

So well written, very skilful, but well short of stirring passion. I would hope for more "balls to the wall" emotion. You have it in you, just let go, trust your emotions, trust your hearts direction.

[Marie]

If we don't take time to examine life, we may not have much of a life to examine. Good message.

[mariah]

hm. very powerful poem, with alot of meaning in the words. i like the part that asks "to stop by and ask,"am i really happy?" i love it. great work my friend :)
-mariah

[Southern Cross]

Other than a few spellings or punctuation overlooks..Loved the premise because it is so true.. The truth is a harsh reminder..the words "being old too early" much depth here