"WAKE UP"

this is the hardest fact. so need we not wake up as "one world"?

A beautiful poem,

a meaningful writing,
a tragic love story
a wonderful book,
a lovely song

And sweet and soft music,

all the vast technology
and its business based usage,

still can't meet the hunger 
of helpless poor child,

still can't provide peaceful,

secure and prosperous life,

to the innocent passengers of life,

in those parts of this world,

declared as third world...!

and it makes a sense 
having all these wonderful qualities ,
how helpless we all are...... 
and thus humanity feels shameful

being surrounded by 
narrow boundaries and laws,
that for the better living of self
we have forgot 
what life actually means.....................……..?

Reviews

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Good read and write. We are spiraling towards the way God made us, slowly but surely we will become. Lives are not lost, they return as we make progress to change a world once apathetic and cruel. More people are aware and care about what happens in this world.

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

agreed dear Brandon..thanks for inspiring words.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Profound and challenging to all of us in the more affluent areas of the world. Life is never just in global terms.

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

thanks dear john.i agree.

[Bertie]

A very brave poem, to attempt to tackle such a vast and emotive subject...Although the writing is transparent I'm not sure how else one might go about it really; its very interesting to include in a poem, the fact that a poem has very little power over the life and death of those suffering everyday. It says a lot to me about the purpose of writing and of art in a world that needs some kind of help that cannot seem to be given. I also think that the fact that the english in the poem is a little bit broken actually serves to make the poem have greater depth as it's another level of communication that has to be deciphered by the reader. It removes it from us and therefore makes it easier for us to realise the aims and purpose of this particular poem...Very though provoking, well done :)

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

Thanks for the review dear Bertie,i truly appreciate your precious thoughts and honest view on this,all i have tried to deliver through this poem is the idea..the message,if you go through my other writings you will find same thing ,that i emphasize on message more than the perfection of language ,which is though very necessary..but English is not mother tongue,i still try my best to at least keep put words without as many mistake,like the grammatical ones ,and as far as concerned with style ,i am still learning and growing...i hope one day i will be able to write as better as it needs to be an good English writer as i believe it all comes through experience and learning..thanks again for being inspiration.stay blessed.

[Holly Mason]

well written on a deep issue.thank you for sharing

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

My pleasure,thanks dear.

[Lipstick_Lesbian]

Innocent passengers of life! Beautiful. I loved this, especially the feelings you elicited through your writing. While it's a vulnerable piece, it's also too true to ignore. Great work!

[Deandra Dawn]

Very nicely done.

[L. Edward Neale]

Indeed well written. Yes, we have the means, but sadly the will is lacking on so many fronts. There is much hope and progress being made, but there is a vast amount of work to be done also. But most of all it begs the question whether we can really call our selves civilised, when materialism creates such monumental imbalances in the world. Food for thought indeed. Thanks for the request.

[Kuhr Gred]

:) i can't say a phrase for this poem.. you are really concern in your society.. great write :)

[Archia]

Quite thoughtful indeed. I found that there was many different aspcets of life in this, many things to think about, to question. And then it all comes together in that last line. Nice job.

[Geraldine]

Really interesting write. Yes, we all need to wake up and face the problems in front of us. ^^