This Feeling

That last message you read struck you and the only thing you can think to do is exit out and close your screen, putting your phone face down. It takes a second for it to register, like when you touch a hot stove, the biggest valve in your heart was just quickly snipped in half. You think for a second, And then it hits you. Like a bullet through your forehead that very second you fall to your knees, You feel Your chest caving in and your entire soul enveloped in darkness. A warmth stuns your torso and your extremities, then you're ice. Your body quivers slightly and you curl into a ball on your bed, breathing with your mouth wide open Just praying that no one hears your miniscule gasps and squeaks. Your mind hardly revives from its catatonic state and the only thing you can manage to whisper is, "I hurt". Repetitively, it becomes faster and your breathing gets sharper as you feel your heart beat race, forcing sharp, ice blood cells through your arteries. Your skin tingles from the pain and all you can think as you whisper your last words is, "I've hurt myself."

Reviews

[Personne]

I, for one, don't think you can ever be too dramatic in writing. Goodness knows how many published authors rely on exaggeration to get their point across. However, this piece of writing feels like a very real happening, one I can relate to, although it's not one someone would like to relate to because it is such an awful feeling. But it seems like the person here has made a choice that they couldn't take back, indicated by the "last words."

I enjoy this piece because it is very relatable and also descriptive. You used a lot of adjectives here, and you used them well. I believe you have a lot of potential for writing, and I look forward to reading more of your work!

[Eagle Cruagh]

Hi Anna,
What is this about hurting yourself ?
Can we just talk about what kind of person we are ?
I think you are being a little dramatic, don`t you ?
I would love to hear from you-----just ordinary human talk.
Want to try it ?
You are probably the most beautiful girl here. Tell me how that
is with you .
------ Eagle Cruagh