a broken eye

I made this poem in one of my classes, so I decided to post it. Please provide feedback, I really want to know how my writing is too people. :)

a broken eye

as you fall into the sky,

think and dream of you and i,

a time forgotten, a time long past,

broken shards of broken glass

the way you die, the way you cry,

you and i, every night,

a place and time, for every tear,

a tear a wrist, a tear a blade, along,

upon, the bloodied glade

a silver spoon, a silver cut, 

along, upon, a deadly rut,

a deadly dip, a deadly rip,

every night, a nightly snip

an ended story, an ended time,

an ended life, an ended rhyme,

a bloodred wrist, a bloodred eye

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Wow �™! That made me feel and think about things I really haven't thought about before. Well done