Protected

Love me for who I am

Wrap my heart in cotton wool

It is likely to implode.

It never learnt to love

just savour the darkness

and hope for brighter moments.

�"-

Place your arms where they belong

Around my body.

Showering in the droplets

of adoration,

Which is hard to accept.

�"�"

From the cold of shadow,

You illuminated, gave direction,

Your words took my hand

And led me to protection

Taught my soul to sing.

�"�"

Without you I am empty

A vessel without a muse.

You are my sun on a cloudy day

My sanctuary in the cold,

And all I have to give you in return

Is all I have.

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Very well written. You explore the themes of love and romance in your own unique way. I think this is one poem of yours which does not deal with loss and longing. What you describe here is pure and simple. Words that every heart blessed with love utters at some point of time, albeit in its own way.

"It never learnt to love
just savour the darkness
and hope for brighter moments." , to me, is a brilliant sentence.

And ofcourse, the conclusion is pure genius.
"And all I have to give you in return
Is all I have."
Brilliant!

[Dan]

I love this - I really do. "And all I have to give you in return is all I have". That is beautiful.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a lovely spin to be sure~ our emotions are so vibrant at the scoop of love affairs of love~ in time however~ if one crushing misstep follows another~ we learn to keep at least half for ourselves~

[StacyPerry]

I really enjoyed the last 2 lines. Thank you for sharing this one with me.

[RDOriginal]

I do find this poem has emotion but it's not of the traditional type we might see elsewhere.

When the narrator admits their heart, "never learnt to love" it's perhaps an admission that because of this they're romantic side is somewhat curtailed. There is a willingness to learn but it's only revealed in, "hope for brighter moments". As a result we can perhaps sympathise that they feel love, "is hard to accept". Maybe if the poem were to brim with emotion, passion and desire as a reader we might find the style out of step with the content?

There are some very nice turns of phrase in this poem. I particularly like the image of resonance I get when you describe the narrator as a "vessel" after previously mentioning "taught my soul to sing". It's as if the narrator is admitting they effectively echo and reflect back the love they're given. Once again not true reciporocal love we might normally expect but the beginnings of something on those lines. I do however agree with FlawedByDesign that, "You are my sun on a cloudy day" sits a little uncomfortably as cliche.

The message that the best and most we can ever offer is ourselves, flawed though we may be is a good one and I think you've done a good job of expressing that.

[Dinesh Sairam]

I'll have to disagree with FlawedByDesign. This poem is brimming with emotion. Simple words and splendid job. One small point - "You are my sun on a cloudy day" and "My sanctuary in the cold" both almost mean the same. You should edit any one of them for a different imagery. Otherwise, great :) Keep writing :)

[FlawedByDesign]

To be honest this poem of your did not imbue me with any kind of emotion. Dont hate me, but it felt bland for some reason. I've become somewhat acquainted with your writing and I know that you can better, if not much better :)

I think you can play on the "protected" part more than you have. He's got to be more to you than just "You are my sun on a cloudy day" - this is cliche...give me your version of this, so to speak :)

[Ruth]

Nicely said hon! Thats all we can offer anyone we love!
Beautifully written and great flow to this one, I like it a lot :)
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

It is difficult to see good when we are shadows by pain and hurt. I like the emotion and feeling in your words. The ending lines are very good. Sometime it take a kind and great love to open a new door to your heart. A excellent poem.
Coyote