The Queen of The Dead Horse & Co.

I went to the Land of Woe...I walked its path...I had to know.

 

A tiny girl wearing a crumpled paper crown, sits humming upon a dead purple horse by the road side.

Her chubby hands cup her solemn down-cast face and she does not look up as she sighs to her court...

"Know something about kites and flying...

...Before you breathe your last..."

 

 

A young man lies face down on the ground, limp and tossed aside like a broken toy.

One finger moves gracefully; tracing in the sandy path these words...over and over and over...

"She stopped my heart with a look...

...Then left me here to die..."

 

 

An ebony tinted woman wrapped in satin ribbons, savagely hugs a rusted swing nailed to a stump.

Her eyes shut tight, her arms bruised from squeezing; she chants feelingly to the moon...

"I give and I give but it's never enough...

...This love reminds me of echos..."

 

 

An old bearded father stands a top a dead branch stretching overhead, reading aloud a love letter from his son.

Finshing, he folds the letter into a hat and places it on his head, mumbling disapprovingly...

"Silver words splattered across the dingy page...

...What hypocrisy..."

 

 

A freckled girl kneels in a patch of copper tulips, painting a mirror black with her hair.

Chewing on rubber kisses and holding the blinded mirror before her face, she whispers low...

"Seedlings come and die and sting...

...And meaningless angels take credit..."

 

 

A man with bleach-blond hair stands beneath a wooden bridge, a match in hand, three aces pinned to his boot.

Covering his face with thick round goggles, ink drips from his mustache as the match is lit...

" London bridges fell too far...

...Today I will regret..."

 

 

I have been to the Land of Woe...

I know its way...

Don't ever go...

 

 

Author's Note

A few strange pictures I had in my head that I attempted to string together.
I hope to add more "Wonderland-ish" images soon.
Critique welcome even if just to say "This is garbage".

If anyone would like to know what these represent, just send me a message and I'll try to explain.
But personally, I think it's more fun if you fill in the blanks yourself. *smile*
Thanks for any thoughts, critiques and comments.

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Beautiful, the way it speaks to the reader! many words yet nothing really concrete attaching each part, challenging to the mind, perfect! Maybe I'm just blinded by the greatness I read, but I don't think anyone would even dare to say "this is garbage" as you said in the note. "Wonderland-ish" I will look forward to read the next ones to come, and maybe I shall read "I have been to the land of Woe.."? If time permits me, I'll be back to review more during the day. Outstanging job.

[DavidRyan]

I like the title change, too.

[DavidRyan]

I might not mention the "I've been to the land of woe..." part so many times. I think if you mentioned it at the beginning and then had the ending one of the "...don't ever go." I think it would be just as effective because it is such a short story that repetition is not needed to remind the reader. Just a thought. I'm very interested to see what you do with this. Well done. The imagery is amazing though. The characters, for the short time they are mentioned are surprisingly full and well-rounded. You definitely did a good job. How do I get you to turn this into a longer story?

[Lauren Marie]

I liked it, though I might take a look at the first picture, it doesn't make as much sense as the other ones do. But that's just me.
I liked the imagery in it and the poetic flow that it had.
Beautiful in a sad and eerie way.
Loved it!
~Lauren