The Queen of The Dead Horse & Co.

I went to the Land of Woe...I walked its path...I had to know.

 

A tiny girl wearing a crumpled paper crown, sits humming upon a dead purple horse by the road side.

Her chubby hands cup her solemn down-cast face and she does not look up as she sighs to her court...

"Know something about kites and flying...

...Before you breathe your last..."

 

 

A young man lies face down on the ground, limp and tossed aside like a broken toy.

One finger moves gracefully; tracing in the sandy path these words...over and over and over...

"She stopped my heart with a look...

...Then left me here to die..."

 

 

An ebony tinted woman wrapped in satin ribbons, savagely hugs a rusted swing nailed to a stump.

Her eyes shut tight, her arms bruised from squeezing; she chants feelingly to the moon...

"I give and I give but it's never enough...

...This love reminds me of echos..."

 

 

An old bearded father stands a top a dead branch stretching overhead, reading aloud a love letter from his son.

Finshing, he folds the letter into a hat and places it on his head, mumbling disapprovingly...

"Silver words splattered across the dingy page...

...What hypocrisy..."

 

 

A freckled girl kneels in a patch of copper tulips, painting a mirror black with her hair.

Chewing on rubber kisses and holding the blinded mirror before her face, she whispers low...

"Seedlings come and die and sting...

...And meaningless angels take credit..."

 

 

A man with bleach-blond hair stands beneath a wooden bridge, a match in hand, three aces pinned to his boot.

Covering his face with thick round goggles, ink drips from his mustache as the match is lit...

" London bridges fell too far...

...Today I will regret..."

 

 

I have been to the Land of Woe...

I know its way...

Don't ever go...

 

 

Author's Note

A few strange pictures I had in my head that I attempted to string together.
I hope to add more "Wonderland-ish" images soon.
Critique welcome even if just to say "This is garbage".

If anyone would like to know what these represent, just send me a message and I'll try to explain.
But personally, I think it's more fun if you fill in the blanks yourself. *smile*
Thanks for any thoughts, critiques and comments.

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Beautiful, the way it speaks to the reader! many words yet nothing really concrete attaching each part, challenging to the mind, perfect! Maybe I'm just blinded by the greatness I read, but I don't think anyone would even dare to say "this is garbage" as you said in the note. "Wonderland-ish" I will look forward to read the next ones to come, and maybe I shall read "I have been to the land of Woe.."? If time permits me, I'll be back to review more during the day. Outstanging job.

[Through the Gateway]

An interesting piece with a maccabre flair. I loved the imagery and can only wonder what each player represents. It does have a very dark "Wonderland-ish" feel to it, and took me to the Land of Woe very quickly and easily. The style that you used kept the off-kilter feel throughout the piece.

Great work, Vesa!

[Xfaerie corpseX]

its cryptic and amazing.. i like it

[E. A. Fielder]

I think its beautiful! the way you stated the imagry was very well done. Not clique at all. I liked it alot!

Wow, there are some powerful images in this piece. I love the way they all flow together, it has a great effect on the reader.
The final stanza really got to me, I dont think I will ever go to the land of woe.
Good luck in the competition.
-ST

[~Sorcha~]

I like this, it makes me want to think, but think of stranger things than I already do. It's a very enjoyable piece, and I would much like to see more either added onto this, or more styled similar to this.

[Phibby Venable]

beautiful images & a dream like trance flow.

[deeps]

I think this is wonderful
A most enjoyable read here
I really like this
You are a gifted writer

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this piece alot .... the story in this is simply amazing... very well told... overall like the imagery in this also... overall thought you did an awesome job on this... keep up the great writes...

[Mandi]

Yes i wanna fill in the blank myself! I'm glad you shared this they were very pretty pictures you've painted in my mind. I think they are a little strange but you put them together in such a nice way it doesn't matter!

[Chaos Stone]

very enjoyable, great vivid yet strangely ambiguous metaphors
keep it up