Dance with Me?

Look at me?

Oh please just look my way.

You come in late and sit, now I wish you'd always stay.

My heart pulls in your direction, ignoring does no good.

So I ask you to a dance, tho I doubt you ever would.

Mischief dances in your eyes as you stare into my own.

Look at me...and show me love I've never known.

 
Dance with me?

While we share this festive night.

Lead me to the dance floor, music our only time.

I've known you just for moments, now forever's on my mind.

The stars take the form of fireflies; the swirling twirling kind.

Your eyes look so piercing, I'm afraid to stare too close.

But won't you dance with me...before the sun becomes our host.


Walk with me?

Down this path I've never been.

Swear I'm the only girl and I'll tease of other men.

Take me in your arms and steal a kiss when no one sees.

Promise to protect me as you scare away the bees.

Murmur soft and low while tucking flowers in my hair.

Won't you walk with me...while we're young, and gay, and fair.


Vow with me?

In this church beneath the trees.

I walk between our families, yet it's only you I see.

Take my hand in yours, and raise it to your lips;

Preachers says that's cheating for it's not yet time to kiss.

Smiling a wicked smile you'll say you've tasted it before.

Won't you vow with me..."for richer or for poor".


Strive with me?

As we face this world together.

If I cry when baby grows, swear I'm still lite as a feather.

Share with me your nightmares so I'll tell you of my fears.

Laugh and tell me "it's ok" when I cover you in tears.

I don't care about the presents; tell me secrets in their stead.

Will you strive with me...'til the earth becomes our bed.


Sit with me?

When it's all that's left to do

Since the day the children left; I saw you crying too.

Our voices getting soft and our gray is showing stronger.

I worry when you hurt; you joke, "We don't got much longer".

Our lives now slow but meaningful, our love that hasn't waned.

Please sit with me...and call me lovely once again.


Stay with me?

As my eyes blur with the these tears.

You lie so still and quiet as you talk about our years.

When you fell in love with me the day I asked you for a dance.

How my laugh had sealed your fate;  "You didn't give me much of a chance".

You wink then murmur softly of my pretty braided hair...

Oh please...please just stay with me...I need you more than I can bear.


Look at me?

Please just touch me one last time?

Hold me in your arm and tell me that you're mine.

Cover me in kisses 'fore the earth can cover you.

Brush away these tears just like you always used to do.

Gaze into my eyes as you twirl me 'round these stones.

Because, since before that day you looked, I've never been so alone.

 

Author's Note

I know the rhyming is pretty horrific and the wording elementary, but then actual rhyming poems have never been my strong-suit. I honestly only like the last stanza...

Update: I just got finished reading over all the reviews and would like to say thank you to everyone who has contributed so far. You have given more meaning and beauty to this piece than I ever did. Your insights and comments are treasured. ^-^

Reviews

[Honeypot]

Ah, you're not giving yourself enought credit with this one. Its a wonderful story of love's progression and the way it evolves, but remains strong. Its very moving, especially the last stanza. Very sad, but still full of love - the undying kind that stays with you for life and maybe beyond. Its a very good job!

[Paladin4life]

Wow this is truly a magnificent piece! I thank you for entering my competion! This poem is brilliant and I love the rhyming! I almost burst into tears sitting at my desk in my lttle office here at work while reading your poem. Thank you once again for this poem. I love it!

[alyssa]

truley great work!! nice write!
hugs
alyssa

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Nice imagery
Lovely write
~Kavish~

[Nix]

Aw, I wasn't expecting that ending. I felt as though I was taken on the journey with her, longing, wishing, so much so that when I reached the end it made my heart sigh. This is a wonderful poem which I really enjoyed, thank you for entering it into my poetry comp. I'm just reading through the entries as we speak. ~ Nix

[Jim Clarke]

This work makes me think of what Cinderella and Ariel were thinking as they pursued their men. Good effort.

[Lexi Nicole]

I personally love rhyming with this, it gave the poem a sort of rhythmic heartbeat, made the whole thing come to life. I love these piece, it's beautiful. It tells a wonderful story. You should give yourself a bit more credit for such lovely writing.

-Howl

[An owl on the moon]

This was so beautifully tender and moving! Loved the imagery, the flow, and the message throughout. Such a joy to read!

[Alucard]

This is a beautiful piece covering the span of a lifetime, the word choice is wonderful and it was a very moving piece!