Dance with Me?

Look at me?

Oh please just look my way.

You come in late and sit, now I wish you'd always stay.

My heart pulls in your direction, ignoring does no good.

So I ask you to a dance, tho I doubt you ever would.

Mischief dances in your eyes as you stare into my own.

Look at me...and show me love I've never known.

 
Dance with me?

While we share this festive night.

Lead me to the dance floor, music our only time.

I've known you just for moments, now forever's on my mind.

The stars take the form of fireflies; the swirling twirling kind.

Your eyes look so piercing, I'm afraid to stare too close.

But won't you dance with me...before the sun becomes our host.


Walk with me?

Down this path I've never been.

Swear I'm the only girl and I'll tease of other men.

Take me in your arms and steal a kiss when no one sees.

Promise to protect me as you scare away the bees.

Murmur soft and low while tucking flowers in my hair.

Won't you walk with me...while we're young, and gay, and fair.


Vow with me?

In this church beneath the trees.

I walk between our families, yet it's only you I see.

Take my hand in yours, and raise it to your lips;

Preachers says that's cheating for it's not yet time to kiss.

Smiling a wicked smile you'll say you've tasted it before.

Won't you vow with me..."for richer or for poor".


Strive with me?

As we face this world together.

If I cry when baby grows, swear I'm still lite as a feather.

Share with me your nightmares so I'll tell you of my fears.

Laugh and tell me "it's ok" when I cover you in tears.

I don't care about the presents; tell me secrets in their stead.

Will you strive with me...'til the earth becomes our bed.


Sit with me?

When it's all that's left to do

Since the day the children left; I saw you crying too.

Our voices getting soft and our gray is showing stronger.

I worry when you hurt; you joke, "We don't got much longer".

Our lives now slow but meaningful, our love that hasn't waned.

Please sit with me...and call me lovely once again.


Stay with me?

As my eyes blur with the these tears.

You lie so still and quiet as you talk about our years.

When you fell in love with me the day I asked you for a dance.

How my laugh had sealed your fate;  "You didn't give me much of a chance".

You wink then murmur softly of my pretty braided hair...

Oh please...please just stay with me...I need you more than I can bear.


Look at me?

Please just touch me one last time?

Hold me in your arm and tell me that you're mine.

Cover me in kisses 'fore the earth can cover you.

Brush away these tears just like you always used to do.

Gaze into my eyes as you twirl me 'round these stones.

Because, since before that day you looked, I've never been so alone.

 

Author's Note

I know the rhyming is pretty horrific and the wording elementary, but then actual rhyming poems have never been my strong-suit. I honestly only like the last stanza...

Update: I just got finished reading over all the reviews and would like to say thank you to everyone who has contributed so far. You have given more meaning and beauty to this piece than I ever did. Your insights and comments are treasured. ^-^

Reviews

[Honeypot]

Ah, you're not giving yourself enought credit with this one. Its a wonderful story of love's progression and the way it evolves, but remains strong. Its very moving, especially the last stanza. Very sad, but still full of love - the undying kind that stays with you for life and maybe beyond. Its a very good job!

[MandaBear]

Its a wonderful story. =)

[Jvl narasimharao]

You have made all of us dance with you with your wonderful poem

[afra]

great write ....i love it

[Sourav]

I think it's sweet, nice and beautifully written. I liked the rhyming... it's good.

[Who Cares]

Since, there have alreay been so many people commenting about how wonderful this piece is. I will keep it brief. Breath-takingly beautiful. Wonderful job

[Morrigan Nicole]

This poem is astounding! I am so amazed, so grateful you entered this masterpiece in my contest, this is exactly what I was looking for! It is perfect in plan and in execution and will definitely be a tough one to top. Absolutely beautiful, the tone is so sweet, yet a little bitter.... But in a good way, one that expresses the aspects of true love. I adore this piece! Geeze! I can't believe how envious I am.... This was a jump start for me, I was beginning to doubt some of the skill on WC! I needed something new, pure and.... This was it. This poem has that special element that is absent from today's literature, or most of it, anyways, some poetry has it, and some doesnt, and the ones that do make all the difference in the world.

Love It.

100/100

[Just Brooke]

Its beautiful. Simplistic yet it travels the footsteps of a growing shared love. I liked it. The repetition was neat, and it was well constructed as well as formatted wonderfully. =]

[Nina Kari]

The rhyming is perfect and the message is too sweet! I love this write, it almost brought tears to my eyes. This took time and effort to think about. To think about the emotions embeded into this work is just fantastic and if you spent no emotion writing this then that make you all the more wonderful. To know which heart strings to pull and which emotions to rip to shreds takes work. Truly, wonderfully perfect. :)

[AllyMarie]

This is amazing. Absolutely amazing. Bravo, brava, *applause*, standing ovation - kind of amazing.

[celyn]

Because, since before that day you looked, I've never been so alone.

Beautiful, wonderful, brilliant, abrupt but just so damn perfect! Love the whole thing. But yes, the last stanza is amazingly poetic.